Police Search (opening scene) short

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#Crime #Thriller #Horror

A police search of a car stopped on the side of the road goes horribly wrong...

Awards

Approved
Winner Draft #1

Summary

3 Reviews | 3 pages | 11 months ago | Draft 1
A policeman comes across a car stopped on the side of the road. Upon searching it, he uncovers a horrifying truth...

(This is meant to be an opening scene for a feature script.)

Industry Reviews


Overall, an exciting action-filled scene, but a story needs to come out at some point. No doubt that it wont, but as of now the scene stands on its own.

Peer Reviews

I enjoyed reading this short. It's one of the few that could be used as a short and a teaser trailer to develop a feature. Very good. I would be interested in reading more.
It is difficult to judge this scene in certain respects because it is only one scene in a script, but the main piece of feedback I have is to make sure that the unique profiles of your characters and the singularity of your broader narrative color every action, interaction, and piece of dialogue. This scene is an action-packed hook, but it doesn't give us specific insight into the story or the characters.

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