Fog short

((IM AN AMATEUR, I WROTE CAMERA MOVEMENTS IN THERE FOR ME WHEN FILMING, please critique the story line and dialogue)) A daughters mother dies an unsolved death, they could not find a body anywhere. Not too long after the daughter starts to hear her mothers voice while walking down the street and (i need help building this part) conflicts arise that keep her from effectively finding the source. But, eventually the girl does and she goes to a foggy field, SPOILER, the fog is what kills her (think of The Mist on netflix, it was a big inspo in this story)



Idk, hopefully some of you guys can help me build off of this and make it better :)