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Coach Murphy

television
By Shawn Decker
Drama

A football fan woman goes on a journey of self discovery and destiny when as a publicity stunt she becomes the first Female head coach in the NFL, but when she proves to be the better person for the job the Male dominated league pushes back.

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Nominee
Draft #1
Peer Rating: 20%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 20%
Draft 1: 47%
1 Reviews | 34 pages | 3 years ago | Draft 2

Summary

In this politically and socially relevant Dramedy Christine Murphy, a former football star in High School but was never had the chance to play in College, takes this publicity stunt and uses it to prove she has what it takes to turn the team around and that she can be just as competent and capable as a man.
Coaching a losing team of has-been’s and misfits to a championship maybe easier than navigating all the of the social politics, misogyny and racial equality protests. With women standing up in politics, entertainment and everyday life to the culture of sexual harassment and gender bias, and the MeToo movement that is taking down powerful men this Coach Murphy will be a showcase for the changes that are taking place post-2016. Christine is challenging the male-dominated and beleaguered NFL to take her seriously as a person and respect her ability.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

This script was available to me since I started reviewing on this site a few weeks ago. I never accepted it, because I know NOTHING about football. I didn’t think it would be fair to you to review something that I would probably be lost on. I spoke to a few football fans at work, and if I had any questions, they told me they could answer. I didn’t have many. That’s not really a good thing.

The most basic of this TV show premise is good and wo...

1 year ago | read more...
Van Lutz Top Reviewer
The idea of the writer is very clear, and the dialog in this screenplay shows that this writer knows quite a lot about the game. As a Dutch person I don't. I believe the success of this script falls or stands based on your knowledge of the game. I was a little lost as to the humor part of the script, because I didn't really think it was funny.

The dialogue has been well written, but I do feel it could be a bit more show and a little less tell....

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I think its a great concept. I would watch the show. I think some of the dialogue is a little too long and wordy. Usually, when it comes to comedy it works better in shorter dialogue. The introductions dialogue seems rushed and unnatural. If this is supposed to be a T.V. series then it should be more action than dialogue. It seems you are telling most of the story through dialogue.

For example, Your montage with the newspaper clip needs to...

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