When the girl he loves breaks up with him, an introspective yet ambitious teenager must figure out how to get what he wants and live the good life in the amoral world that surrounds him.
After the girl he loves breaks up with him, Elijah realizes his current trajectory in life will not lead him where he wants to go. He must abandon the moral framework that has guided his life thus far in order to get what he wants and find a new one to replace it with lest he be corrupted by the hedonistic world that surrounds him.
My one dialogue critique would be from the opening scene with Penny on page 2. When Penny says the whole spheal about how looking at Eli is like looking in a mirror, it didn't feel real. I understand it sets up the theme of the show, but I would find a way to deliver the mess...