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Hammer Hero (Second Draft)

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By JONATHAN BARBOUR
Animation,Action/Adventure,Comedy

When the chosen champion of humanity mouths off to the Goddess, he's replaced by his unqualified and underprepared step-brother.

Approved
Winner
Draft #1
Peer Rating: 60%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 60%
Draft 1: 64%

Summary

Five champions were selected to serve the goddess and fight the monsters known as the blight. Bernard has never held a weapon in his entire life, yet somehow he's found himself on the front lines of combat, just struggling to stay alive.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Hey Jonathan, I think you recently reviewed the script I wrote called Rooted – I really appreciated your feedback.

I think the strongest parts of this script was it’s concept as well as the cast of characters you’ve assembled. I think the idea here is really interesting and has lots of potential and you’ve got a great cast of personalities and characters.

Firstly, I think you should spend some more time refining the formatting of the scri...

1 week ago | read more...
Andrew Dee Top Reviewer
Concept:
There really isn't anything here that's incredibly different. This episode set up the traditional heroes' journey with the call to action for the hero of humble origins. I guess, the type of civilization is kind of new but the blight are just another generic alien/monster species that the hero must fight, I believe the term "the blight" has been used several types before.

Story:
The story is actually kind of interesting. The story...

2 weeks ago | read more...
I would definitely watch this show. Gods and Titans in a modern context. You’ll probably get comparisons to American Gods, but yours isn’t really like it at all except perhaps for the tone.

My biggest complaint is that I want more. To be an hour TV episode, you’ll need around 44 pages, usually broken into a teaser act, three or four regular acts and a coda act. The teaser and coda are both short. Look at On Our Merry to see how this is done....

2 weeks ago | read more...
Matt Gorman Top Reviewer

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