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short

By Cyle Brooks
Action/Adventure,Horror,Thriller

Slaying demons and kicking ass are his specialty.

Approved

Nominee
Draft #1

Peer Rating: 40%

Industry Rating: N/A

2 Reviews | 15 pages | 2 weeks ago | Draft 1

#horror #Rated-R #gore #Action/Adventure #anti hero #First Fifteen

After demon-slaying anti-hero Shadow Vile Figure (aka SVF) has taken down and defeated several strange and unusual monsters, Mayor Griffon tasks him to protect his niece, Veronica, as she has become the number one target of the world's most feared enemy: Satan himself.

Rated R for frenetic sequences of strong bloody horror violence and gore throughout, pervasive language, sexual content and some drug references.

A new way to approach super hero stories where the vilain became a hero

First let me say that this is technically a really well written screenplay. The main character SVP seems a really interesting and complex character. Not your typical superhero. Although the script I read seems taken out of a feature film, since it is cut at the end. I would really hope to see it some day on the screen.
Some things I noticed along the way:
1-The dialogue in general is a bit off. Especially on the first two pages, it is a on t...

1 week ago | read more...

Estephan Khattar Top Reviewer

Fun style is overshadowed by underdeveloped characters and formatting.

I had fun with your first fifteen pages because you have a clear grasp of the style of film you're making, calling on a comic action vernacular that is reminiscent of films in the early 2000s. (Shoot 'em Up, Underworld, The Spirit)

I have outlined some technical errors below because I think it is important to separate feedback into chunks: Mechanics, Story. I hope in this way you can take and apply the feedback that resonates and ignore the o...

2 days ago | read more...

Kristopher MacNeill