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#Comedy #Crime

His father wants him to follow in his footsteps... but those footsteps lead to murder.

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1 Reviews | 116 pages | 5 years ago | Draft 1
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Here are my thoughts for your script:

1. Concept - I liked what you went with for the concept. Having a troubled son and his wife try to follow in the footsteps of his father in the hitman business. I thought that was great!

2. Story - The story started out fairly good in the first act. However, a bit into the second act, it starts going in multiple directions that are a bit hard to follow along with. I think if it was tied together more wi...

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