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Cabal

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By wokensheep
Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Mystery/Suspense

An FBI Agent with mysterious capabilities is plagued by unanswered questions of his past while chasing the trail of ominous dark figures that can’t seem to leave him alone.

Approved
Nominee
Draft #3
Peer Rating: 67%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 3: 67%
2 Reviews | 43 pages | 7 months ago | Draft 3

Summary

Mr. Robot Meets the X - files.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

I will be addressing format and not story. My apologies to the writer and to the writer of Angels Can Die. Please also see my review for that script as it contains almost all of the same format issues as this one. Format errors create confusion for the reader and that confusion tends to be cumulative. Thus, when a professional reader gets bogged down in format errors early on, he/she stops reading.

Everything I mention here should be consider...

7 months ago | read more...
Matt Gorman Top Reviewer
The start of your story did a great job at grabbing my attention. Starting with a chase to save a kidnapped child immediately had me interested. Especially at the end when the supernatural started to pop up. That helped me to immediately know what kind of story I was about to experience.

I also really liked this world that you've built and the mystery that you established early on. I really wanted to know more about those shadow creatures tha...

5 months ago | read more...
JONATHAN BARBOUR Top Reviewer

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