Treena short

Start: good, easy to follow up - clear idea of the role of the main character, her position in society.

Script structure: great to follow, plot twist with good ending. Make sure you stick with the script structure, sometimes it is a little too narrative. You should only write what we see/hear - not the characters thoughts. 'Our heroine' no need to put that. ' 'Surpassingly she is more calm' - > no need to say 'surprisingly'
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