I read through the story first with a blind eye not paying attention to anything but what was on the page and it was difficult to understand at first. I feel that the opening scene needed more detail and scene heading and action so we can know where we are at and what’s happening instead of just stating with dialogue.
There was a lack of description of the characters when we first meet them. I would like to know what they looked like and get a...

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