Going For Broke
Two zany songwriters join a tipsy Englishman, his daughter, and a goofy helicopter pilot, rob some con men, run into trouble, and wind up in a horse-drawn wagon chase through Mexico.
This is an absurd, slapstick comedy farce, in the vein of “Caddy Shack”, “The Three Stooges”, “The Pink Panther”, “National Lampoon”, and “The Hangover”. Most of the humor features outrageous situations and stunts which suspend both belief and in some cases, the laws of gravity. WARNING: The comedy can be both raunchy and sexist at times, so if the reader is looking for a politically-correct, serious character study, this script is NOT for them.
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