Inner City Blues
On the last day of his life, Trey maneuvers through the socio-economics, systemic racism, and hood politics of living (and dying) in Southside Jamaica, Queens
A culmination of my own experiences and stories that I've collected in my life growing up in Southside Jamaica, Queens, and sprinkles of my favorite hood classics. This script began as an homage to one of my favorite films, Spike Lee's "Do The Right Thing", but ended up becoming a very personal cathartic experience
Being that this script was written over 2 years ago, it saddens me that the term #BlackLivesMatter has to still be put out there. On the flip side, it gives me all the reason to continue writing and telling these stories
But now, it is definitely better.
We immediately get into the story thanks to the flashback early in the story. But without the flashback, the story drags a little bit just the fact that he goes to work already takes 15 to 20 pages.
In term of the scenes, I had a hard time with the intercut, it was very confusing as it hard to focus on two locations at the same time when reading. It's t...
What a wonderful concept you have here. Original.
I must confess. The opening got me interested but the middle of the script... Not so much. Nothing was happening. The scenes were well written except all scenes in the middle of the story has a lot of chit chat. Our protagonist is interesting but not compelling enough.
Honestly, the middle dragged a bit. Nothing interesting. The beginning pacing and the ending pacing was absolutely...
The writer does a solid job of creating an accurate and...