While We Sleep
short
A couple caring for their terminally ill son must face reality.
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1 Reviews |
8 pages |
1 year ago
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Draft 1
Summary
Looking for general feedback on the premise, structure, pacing and dialogue.
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The concept, character development, and story are fairly defined. The dialogue is pretty realistic, while the structure is great for a short film.
The bursting of an initial argument where the reader does not know the reason why is very interesting. Comparing a broken tube and replacing it with the existential question of keeping or not Hannah and Stephen's son alive, and also Stephen's line: "There are no alternatives, are there?", is the st...
The bursting of an initial argument where the reader does not know the reason why is very interesting. Comparing a broken tube and replacing it with the existential question of keeping or not Hannah and Stephen's son alive, and also Stephen's line: "There are no alternatives, are there?", is the st...
1 year ago
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