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While We Sleep

short
By Liam Treacy
Drama

A couple caring for their terminally ill son must face reality.

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Peer Rating: 47%
Industry Rating: N/A
1 Reviews | 8 pages | 1 year ago | Draft 1

Summary

Looking for general feedback on the premise, structure, pacing and dialogue.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

The concept, character development, and story are fairly defined. The dialogue is pretty realistic, while the structure is great for a short film.

The bursting of an initial argument where the reader does not know the reason why is very interesting. Comparing a broken tube and replacing it with the existential question of keeping or not Hannah and Stephen's son alive, and also Stephen's line: "There are no alternatives, are there?", is the st...

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