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Too Strong To Die

short
By Dedrick Pitter
Action/Adventure,Drama

A determined young girl sets off to find her mother in a fabled place, but when that place makes her hallucinate her resolve wavers.

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Peer Rating: 27%
Industry Rating: N/A
1 Reviews | 10 pages | 2 years ago | Draft 1

Summary

A soon-to-be queen of her tribe has been obsessed with finding her mother ever since she disappeared in search of a place known as the Field of Dreams. She finally sets out to find her and the field of dreams, and when she reaches her destinations she's met with a stark reality.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

A delightful little script full of fantasy, quests, and spirits; however, the plotline is confusing in parts, and the script is riddled with formatting issues.
I hope these references and examples will help,
Jack (aka DRayVan)

FORMATTING ISSUES: Details below
• SCENE HEADERS
• BEATS
• CHARACTER INTRODUCTIONS/DESCRIPTIONS
• DIALOGUE: On-the-nose; spoon-feeding the audience
• DIALOGUE: Parentheticals – Several examples

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1 year ago | read more...
D Ray Van Top Reviewer

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