Madelyn Saunders

Madelyn S.

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Madelyn Saunders 5 years ago

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Identity crisis short
Genre: Drama
Rating: 47%
I am going to go through this review similar to a checklist. Starting with the concept which I might say is original and not corresponding with any other movie/short story I have ever seen, but I don't watch these types of movies so I'm not sure. The logline/first ten pages drew me in mainly because I wanted to know how the character was going to commit suicide, but not because of the bathroom scene that was worthless to the story. Some scenes are well written and properly choreographed; some. The script did provide a sort of compelling character that developed traits similar to what normal people experience so I can give that. The conflict is genuine and like some situations that people have to go through and her situations kept racking up so props on that. The climax, the thing that everyone looks forward in the end and leans to especially if we know that Victor might kill himself at the end; which he does. I mean, it's pretty climatic. Overall, the script went nowhere a lot and that if some altercations were made this could have been a good short story, but with the "Bob hired me to make pornography" thing that we were left with was like a Disney villain scheme out of nowhere that made no sense and was just a half-assed reason for his life to be destroyed. I think things could have been different and with changes, this will become a great story.
MadelynSaunders
Madelyn Saunders 5 years ago

just joined ScriptMother!