I felt that this was way too short. We need a little bit more to go on. There is virtually no character development. We don't know what either of them looks like. The concept was okay, it wasn't boring, but at the same time, it wasn't rather interesting. In fact, it was what you did do however, it was dialogue. I felt that it was excellent and that you know how to write what people would say. The structure of the story was also very well done and it was one of the best things that you did. But back to the character development, there was none to be found. I wanted to know more about who these people are. It didn't really pull me in, because they just rush into a theater, and they sit down and watch a horror film. People want well-written characters, and unfortunately, these characters were not well written. I know its a short film, but at the same time, you need some character development or else the story just doesn't work. The story was okay, but I didn't really understand it in the least bit. They watch a film, and some horrible baby comes out of the woman's gut. There is no build-up. Even if it is a short film, you need some build-up or else it just feels rushed, and that is exactly how I felt. Rushed. I want a slower buildup, and then you can go hog wild or whatever, but it just didn't work for me. Maybe to others, it will, but to me, it did not, and the only thing that I felt after reading, was that it was way to fast, and I needed it to slow down. The concept was also just weird and didn't work for me. It didn't make any sense, and people need some sense to know if this is a good film. So for me, unfortunately, this was a subpar film, that definitely needs some work, before possibly trying to actually make it. I want more, and people will want more if they are to think that this is a very good film. So keep at it, and maybe it will soon be so. You just need to work a little bit harder, before trying to get it made into a short film. But I think that you will be able to do so, so good luck.
