Jackson Boswell

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A group of piped out musicians start a band together to start their careers back up again and make it big.
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JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 3 years ago

uploaded a script.

Borderline television
Genre: Drama,Comedy
A group of piped out musicians start a band together to start their careers back up again and make it big.
JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 5 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Roses of Venom short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Drama
The story of two lovers torn apart by the sting of an Asian Giant Hornet which brought about the "death" of one of them.
JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 5 years ago

uploaded a script.

Hillbilly television
Genre: Comedy
Brody Elmer, a hillbilly, who thinks the government is out to get him moves to LA to start a video series for others.
JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 5 years ago

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Westphall television
Genre: Comedy,Action/Adventure
Rating: 73%
Wow. Really great, love everything about it. I really think this show has legs and that it could make an awesome series. You are clearly an amazing writer and have got some great skills. It was difficult at the start to follow and work out what the story was about, but when I read on it became clear. I think there could be a scene at the start of the show, even just a short few second cut to a family at home watching the show to establish that it is a sitcom. I think that the start of the show was a bit slow, and you could cut out a small bit of the actual sitcom part at the start and got on to the point sooner. There could be some flashback scenes that show Anton's past and what it was like growing up. There could be a bit more time fleshing out the character Anton and working out what he is like and what he likes as we only see him in the sitcom and then working out his world. The flashback idea could help with that. Another idea which could help fleshing out the characters is that each episode could focus on a certain character and taking them on a journey and they learn things about themselves as well as following the main plot of the show. Another note I have is that I think there could be more of a comedic element added. Steve and Jenny could be a little more comedic, as they are already comfortable in their environment and have space for that. As Anton becomes more confident, he could bring a cool comedic element too. The show should follow the journey of not only just the three of them, but I think a major element which could be cool is to follow Anton's journey from the sitcom into his new life and how he learns about himself and learns more about what the world really is. A cool tool that I like to do to help develop characters is to "cast" the show with real actors so I can get a feel of what they look and talk like. Im not sure if you have already thought of that but it might help with future episodes. Overall, I LOVE this script and think that it could be a really cool show which is worthy of actually going on TV. I am interested to learn more about where you are going with the rest of the season and what cool ideas you have in store. Really well done.
JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 5 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Westphall television
Genre: Comedy,Action/Adventure
A simple background character from a sitcom learns that his television world is just one of many.
JacksonBoswell
Jackson Boswell 5 years ago

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