David Martin

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Hush! Draft #1

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A young man discovers a family secret greater than his own.
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Pine Draft #1

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A teenage boy stops eating when he suspects his parents are trying to poison him.
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BÊTE NOIRE Draft #1

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Slimy creatures haunt a young man's life, what to do?
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David Martin 5 years ago

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Inner City Blues feature
Genre: Drama
Trying his best to not get swallowed up by the streets of Southside Jamaica, Queens, Trey maneuvers through the standard baby momma drama, systemic racism and socio-economic disenfranchisement that his hood brings, but little does he know that this is the last day of his life.
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Pine short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense
A teenage boy stops eating when he suspects his parents are trying to poison him.
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

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Anonymous - Episode 1: Pilot short
Genre: Drama
Rating: 20%
I can assume by the writing that you are new to the game and probably a teenager yourself. I’m wondering if you’ve seen the film “I Know What You Did Last Summer” as your story line is very similar. Upon opening the script I noticed an immediate typo which discouraged me from reading any further but I did plié through the script, it being the first one I am reading on this site. Pliot. (Pilot) Is this for a TV series or for a feature film (or short)? There are ideas in your script such as when the character is thinking and you write this as action. A golden rule in screenwriting is to write what you see. You can’t see their thoughts. You can suggest it by action rather than words. Like shrugging ones shoulders or frowning or ... but also be careful with too much direction of the character. I will commend you on finishing the script but is the script finished? We know nothing about the ‘stalker.’ You did do a fairly good job at developing characters but I would suggest going even further by giving them special quirks. Overall, your script needs work. You need to edit out those thoughts and study formatting. I was immediately turned off by the typo and the improper formatting and this script, as is, would not get very far with a reader let alone an agent or producer. Keep. Plugging essay though. The talent is there. You just need to reel it in and hone it. Good luck. And Write On!
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

uploaded a script.

BÊTE NOIRE short
Genre: Horror
Slimy creatures haunt a young man's life, what to do?
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

uploaded a script.

Pine short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense
A teenage boy stops eating when he suspects his parents are trying to poison him.
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

uploaded a script.

Hush! feature
Genre: Horror
A young man discovers a family secret greater than his own.
DavidMartin
David Martin 6 years ago

just joined ScriptMother!