Caleb Ferguson

Caleb F.

Ranking
Establishing Shot
Reviewer Rating
N/A
Scripts
2
Reviews
2
Scripts
short

Nobody Likes Nate Draft #1

Sign In to see % Rating
After accidentally causing their friend's death during a game of hide and seek, a group of friends struggle to decide what to do with the body.
Reviews
Following
Activity
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just purchased a review. Claim it here

Nobody Likes Nate short
Genre: Comedy,Family
After accidentally causing their friend's death during a game of hide and seek, a group of friends struggle to decide what to do with the body.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just claimed a review for a script.

So long and thanks for all the fish short
Genre: Comedy,Drama
With 5 minutes left to live, 4 young adults are coming to terms with their entire lives ending and how their friendships may not be what they originally were.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just purchased a review. Claim it here

Nobody Likes Nate short
Genre: Comedy,Family
After accidentally causing their friend's death during a game of hide and seek, a group of friends struggle to decide what to do with the body.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

completed a review for

A Single Timeline short
Genre: Action/Adventure
Rating: 47%
The script you have written has potential, but there are a few areas that could benefit from improvement. Here are some suggestions for each section: 1. INTRODUCTION: - The opening scene lacks a clear purpose or conflict. Consider establishing the main goal or conflict that the protagonist will face early on to engage the audience. 2. DESCRIPTION: - The descriptions of the locations and characters could be more vivid and detailed. Add sensory details and specific visual cues to help the readers visualize the scenes and characters. 3. DIALOGUE: - The dialogue can be improved by making it more natural and authentic. Pay attention to the character's voice and speech patterns, ensuring they are consistent and unique. - Consider adding subtext and deeper emotional layers to the conversations to create more depth and complexity in the characters' relationships. 4. PACING: - Some scenes could benefit from tighter pacing to maintain the reader's interest. Remove unnecessary details or actions that don't contribute to the overall plot or character development. 5. STRUCTURE: - The script could benefit from clearer scene transitions and headings. Use scene headings to indicate changes in location, time, and important details, which will help readers follow the story more easily. 6. CLARITY: - Some sections lack clarity and may confuse readers. Make sure the actions and events are described in a clear and concise manner to avoid ambiguity. 7. CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT: - Consider adding more depth to the characters, such as their motivations, fears, and desires. This will make them more relatable and engaging for the audience. 8. THEME: - It would be helpful to establish a clear theme or central idea that the story explores. This can help give the script more coherence and depth. Remember, these suggestions are meant to provide constructive feedback. Ultimately, the choices you make as the writer are up to you.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just claimed a review for a script.

A Single Timeline short
Genre: Action/Adventure
A 18 year old Ron, has been raised to protect a single timeline from branching off but his true past resurfaces.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

completed a review for

Chris & Dave television
Genre: Comedy
Rating: 53%
Overall this is a good script. The idea is funny, creative, and lighthearted. To me, it feels like I just embarked on these adventures along with Chris and Dave. However, I feel as though it needs more connection when it comes to all of the scene shifts and whatnot. Try to make it easier for the audience to understand how each scene leads into the next. Along with that, when it comes to your sluglines you can use "continuous" instead of "day" to keep a scene flowing. It connects everything better and doesn't make everything seem like its own separate scene, even when it's connected. Other than that it is a decent story with lovable characters who do stupid stuff. It would be fun to see another episode of Chris and Dave with more character development, story progression, and maybe a little bit of money-making so they don't get killed!
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just claimed a review for a script.

Chris & Dave television
Genre: Comedy
Fired and on the verge of homelessness, a wildly optimistic zoomer and his boomer best friend stumble onto a high paying craigslist job that will save them if they can convince a lonely man that life is worth living.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

Nobody Likes Nate short
Genre: Comedy,Family
After accidentally causing their friend's death during a game of hide and seek, a group of friends struggle to decide what to do with the body.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

uploaded a script.

Nobody Likes Nate short
Genre: Comedy,Family
After accidentally causing their friend's death during a game of hide and seek, a group of friends struggle to decide what to do with the body.
CalebFerguson
Caleb Ferguson 1 year ago

just joined ScriptMother!