A poorly written script that has no story, least of all a plot to work towards. This redundant's any comment to structure, concept, pace, character, dialogue, etc. As the reader would never the less read the script through to the end... least of all page 4, max. I, unfortunately, committed myself to have to read it through. It's clear the writer put no effort (self-pride) into this at all, and the writer needs to realise that; Then why should the reader? The writer lacks writing and storytelling passion, which in turn gives for a lack of wanting to learn the beauty of this medium. Sorry if I'm blunt, and am unconstructive hereto. If you are serious about wanting to become a screenwriter, then you need to learn how to. There's is a saying in this industry: Keep writing... keep writing... I have a more logical saying: Don't keep writing till you know-how. You must have passion!
