Andrew Cross

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Lookout Draft #2

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A fire lookout hears of the news of his fiancé's passing while alone atop a mountain.
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Andrew Cross 5 months ago

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Lookout short
Genre: Drama
A fire lookout hears of the news of his fiancé's passing while alone atop a mountain.
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Andrew Cross 5 months ago

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So long and thanks for all the fish short
Genre: Comedy,Drama
Rating: 47%
I think that this is a great concept. I like the question you're asking here: what would you do with your last 5 minutes? What would that look like? I think that you can make some improvements with the action lines and some of the dialogue. I also think you can develop your characters a little bit more (again I know it's hard to do with a short). I also feel like the it might benefit you to draw out some moments of real tension. I think that there are certainly attempts here but it doesn't always feel like the stakes are as high as they would be. Overall, I think it's a cool concept and you've done a good job here. Keep finetuning and exploring your characters. Keep asking yourself what you or your friend group would do in these situations, how you'd react. Thank you for letting me read it and I hope you keep working through it.
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Andrew Cross 5 months ago

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So long and thanks for all the fish short
Genre: Comedy,Drama
With 5 minutes left to live, 4 young adults are coming to terms with their entire lives ending and how their friendships may not be what they originally chocked up to be.
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Andrew Cross 5 months ago

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Lookout short
Genre: Drama
A fire lookout hears of the news of his fiancé's passing while alone atop a mountain.
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Andrew Cross 5 months ago

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