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A couple of other comments: I like the subtle humor, but I think you need more. Dark humor will definitely add more to this TV series. This could be one of Eliza's redeeming traits, that she is quirk/funny. But again, Eliza needs to be redeemable. Even Walter White from Breaking Bad had some redeeming characteristics, but Eliza needs more definition and refining in your rewrite
Overall, the dialogue is the best part about your script. What I would try to do is rethink your story and base it around what YOU want your audience to leave with. In other words, what is the central idea that you want your audience to understand when watching this film? Once you figure that out, create a story from it, and make sure it has a beginning that builds and builds toward a climax, which solidifies your central idea. Here's an example. Take the film, Rocky. The central idea of Rocky is that "no matter who you are or where you come from, you can reach the top if you work hard enough". This message is solidified in the protagonist, Rocky Balboa. Why? Because screenplay takes us through his humble beginning, and every scene revolves around challenges Rocky faces, and the persistence he shows. Each scene builds toward one moment, and that moment is a world title match with Apollo Creed. The climax sends a clear message of the central idea. Your script needs to follow this formula. I hope this helps!
Again, the overall sequence of events throughout your episode are generally well-placed and I have a clear understanding of the plot. However, it needs to flow without so much verbal exposition, and the scenes need to be engineered in a way that creates the most drama without sacrificing your plot.
One thing I would recommend is to make things a little more modern in your script. The racist language seems way more overtly used in your script than it is in real life. It's so overt that it seems comical. If it was the 1950s, I'm sure that language would have been throw around more, but in the modern day it's rarely used even amongst white supremecists. In fact, I would remove all of that language altogether and just used it very occasionally in major scenes where you want to make an impact on your audience. The reason why is that your characters use these slurs so often that they lose their punch. Save the punch for when it matters. Use it to the advantage of your actual story, rather than making it a shocking novelty throughout the script.