First of all there are no grammatical or spelling errors and the format is correct. There are some tense scenes and I was hooked on the story and wanted to see how it would get wrapped up. The thing is it never does get wrapped up, Jonathan also has no character development and none of the conflicts are resolved. The only thing that happens is the reveal in the end but that is not enough to leave the viewer satisfied. Also I don’t know if you have been inspired by the movie “the machinist” or you just haven’t seen it but the story SPOILER ALERT (the plot twist where the depressed protagonist is an insomniac and an anorexic throughout the movie because he killed a young boy in a hit and run) is basically the same. Now I don’t want to spoil the ending of the movie in case you haven’t seen it but if you see it you will see that it is more satisfying for the audience even though the movie revolves basically around the same concept. The dialogue also feels kind of unrealistic at certain parts of the story especially the one with Marvin. Try to give exposition in a more indirect way than having the characters straight up saying “did you forget when you….” Ect. Also you can cut some scenes to improve the pace. For example the interview scene could start with the interviewer straight up asking questions to Jonathan. On a good note the reveal was nicely prepared and you gave clues throughout the story. Also there are some scenes that could look amazing and creepy if they were filmed for example in the subway. Anyway the script is not bad just try to make those improvements and maybe add more to the ending. The minimum word count is 400 so I will just copy paste the beginning of my review sorry for that lol because I don’t have anything else to say. If you want to ask or discuss anything feel free to send me a message. First of all there are no grammatical or spelling errors and the format is correct. There are some tense scenes and I was hooked on the story and wanted to see how it would get wrapped up. The thing is it never does get wrapped up, Jonathan also has no character development and none of the conflicts are resolved. The only thing that happens is the reveal in the end but that is not enough to leave the viewer satisfied.