I would like to say that overall, this is a good pilot. It brings the characters all together and provides us with a fulfilling story for each one, but not revealing too much backstory either, perfect. For me, the high points of your writing come from your ability to create and explain characters, even ones that aren't or don't seem significant to the plot or story. I'd say your low point is your dialogue, although it's decent, it could definitely use some work when trying to relate these characters to your readers. Some of the things they say seem out of place. But with all that being said, I'm excited and hooked for episode 2! My favorite characters are Pedro and Eric, I like Pedro's fiery attitude and Eric is just a cool guy that seems fun to hang out with, but not to get in a fight with haha. Keep going!