TITLE: CHAIN LETTER (2020) AUTHOR: CYLE BROOKS GENRE: HORROR SCRIPT STRUCTURE*: REAL-TIME (The causality of whatever conflicts are thrown at the characters is presented in real time.) LISTED AS "FULL FEATURE" BUT ONLY 16 PAGES LONG! COMMENTS: · OPENING: STATUS QUO – Need an EST. shot since CHAIN LINK hasn’t been introduced. Such as: INT. FILTHY SURGICAL LAB - PATIENT ON TABLE – (TIME OF DAY?) · “BOOM” OMIT · NEED OPTIC OF COMPUTER – “MONITOR” · REWRITE TO ACTIVE VOICE: “appears to simply enjoy the torture” - “Thrives on the torture.” · Script title: SUPER: · Be careful using similar names beginning with the same letter: JEANETTE and JENNIFER and JOSHUA; reader can get lost in tracking who's who · OMIT: Using audio inserts. Include them into your Scene Action · TEXT: This is a device visual not dialogue - rewrite to correct format · Good lead in to OFFICER COLEMEN from Jennifer’s dialogue · Suggested rewrite on characters in Scene Action: OFFICER MANDY (uniform accents her slim figure, early 30s) OFFICER COLEMAN (Black, sturdy, determined, late 40s) · SCENE HEADER – A transitional optical shot is best too present as : INT./EXT. when coming outside to an inside location · CRIMINAL – How do we know it’s a Criminal because he’s handcuffed? Revise to an Arrested Suspect – unless he’s a WANTED CRIMINAL · Adverbs don’t go at the end of the sentence. · Suggestion: Why not open with the police finding Justin’s body first. This is a good set up to drive the momentum forward and urgency to find the creep who tortured Justin and mutilated his face. · You need to mention “FORENSICS” · Rylie/Chain Link fight - porcelain smash to the head can cause a skull fracture. Has potential but I felt ripped off because you didn't write a "feature".