Mental breakdown stories involving incompetent humans and lizards in human suits is a very intriguing concept. The story itself kept me hooked. Every other moment, it seemed like Brett was going through some sort of violent fantasy, bizarre day dream, or legitimate alien encounter. Brett is a very well designed main character who's issues can be pointed to at least substantive reasons which makes this feel like a mystery. I expect lizard people, but it is reasonable for Brett to be bonkers. The overall story seems like a pretty neat roller coaster as I'm getting consistent highs such as the bathroom stall check and cabinet portal. It juxtaposes very well with the lows of Brett's mundane failure to achieve his work obligations. Though, the introductory scene could definitely use some tweaking. It feels like a horror intro that is a bit too familiarly played. News report, jump scare, and then dream wake up can come off as immediately distasteful. It treats an audience member like an idiot, because it is literally throwing exposition and jump scares off the bat. It just feels lazy, and it is too much to throw upfront that gets offset by lack of originality . The dialogue feels fairly natural for a plot involving lizard people, but Liz's dialogue with Brett feels like it shoehorns in the "Alien Illuminati" reference. Overall, the dialogue could use tweaking but is reasonably excused with the premise being lizards in human suits. The main issue is that this is an expensive concept that really needs to ace it's intro in order to subsequently get interest and then funding.
Disclaimer: This is my first review so I suck at formulating specific critiques as opposed to just general impressions. Concept I found that the concept of having a serial killer choose victims based on an email chain to be technologically relevant and yet oddly not glamorous. This concept seems to be a blend of the movies Unfriended and the Ring only using a lamer technology like chain link email. It is harder for me to be attracted to an email chain serial killer when I got Facebook video chat killer or VHS tape killer. If the killer's hallmark is an email with a photo and text, it just doesn't seem all that visually stimulating to me. It unfortunately seems like a regressive and crippling concept in an already predictable genre such as slashers. Story A mental patient escapee that has a semi-supernatural penchant with technology and brutal systemic murder is a cool combo. The police, killer, and immature yet unlikeable youth trifecta is a classic. I feel like it is okay for the killer to be somewhat shallow. However, the police and the teenagers could perhaps use some more seasoning before being fed to Chain Link's kill count. Structure I actually think the structure hits the gore beats at the right time and place. The mysterious yet blunt nature of how the first victim played out was tastefully done. However, it makes me wonder how he was caught alive and tortured while Rylie was killed immediately. It makes me question how stable this serial killer's murdering style is beyond the hallmark "Weak Link." Character Development and Dialogue It was a great idea to sacrifice Rylie immediately as she had her time to shine with her meta reference of The Ring. The fight choreography and imagery paints a brutal bloody scenery. The dialogue and characters have depth, but it is unfortunately shallow. I know their roles to play as poised police officers and horny teenagers, but that's all that they seem like. In fact, I want the villain to kill these characters, because I'm aware of how egregiously one note they seem. By being one dimensional, I'm only really in it for the death scenes. I feel like I could get 80% of my enjoyment just by watching the death scene montage on Youtube and absorbing the kills as opposed to the plot.