Very clever the way you started the story - I was genuinely surprised at the revelation that the Man was there by himself. Overall, the story flows well and I feel the main character was developed well considering the small amount of time we had to get to know him. He was quirky, humorous and entertaining. The premise is timely, as much of the world is still living in some form of a lockdown. Some might say that there may not be an audience for quarantine films, and usually I agree - but the humorous approach I think separates it from the general “reliving the experience the whole world had” type story. A couple things I’d work on: Name the main character. I know you were withholding that partially because of the reveal that he was talking to himself - but that was the one thing that kept me from really buying into the character. You did a great job building a compelling character through dialog and action, but I still don’t feel like I know them without a name. Name the Bond movie - we specifically name Jurassic Park, but not which Bond movie it was. If it's something he's watched 150 times - he's going to know and say the name, probably even re-enact it line for line. It’s a little redundant to say “The virus went viral four years ago”. Personally I’d go with “It all started 4 years ago…” I wouldn’t use the term “retard” - it could be overly offensive to some. After killing the military officer, I really wanted to SEE more of the man making it to the base rather than just jumping into a recap.
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