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Joshua Groenewaldt

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Scripts: 4
Reviews: 7

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Without Words short
Genre: Drama
Logline: A father's struggle to finally communicate with his deaf son; to talk with his son for the first time.
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1 year ago
The First Mage feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: In a world where man and magic are new, Enosh must battle evil to save the love of his life.
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1 year ago
Love for Christmas short
Genre: Animation
Logline: When Santa Claus loses his Christmas spirit, he receives some loving assistance from Cupid.
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1 year ago
The Mourning After short
Genre: Drama
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Okay, I'm going to be frank and admit that I didn't really understand the meaning behind this at all. Perhaps you were trying to say that life can change in the blink of an eye but if that was your aim I still think it could have been done better. These two stories were completely detached for each other and don't even contrast each other in any kind of way. I will also say that there needs to be more character development to show the audience that the audience why these characters are killing themselves. This concept is a bit weak and could use tweaking. People killing themselves is a deep topic and needs more investigating than this. You can achieve this with four pages as well so don't feely you have to write a feature film around this; a short film is able to tackle deep topics. I would just recommend to dig a little deeper, expand. If you are going to show two separate stories, they either need to relate or contrast to each other in some kind of way, especially if they are interwoven like this. Otherwise, you'll just leave your audience confused as to what they're meant to get out of this. Use of contrast can be a lot more effective in terms of getting a message across. Look at 2019's Parasite for an example of how a writer can contrast two separate things in order to convey a deeper meaning. You are able to use dialogue in something like this as well I might add. Being 'artsy' doesn't always mean cutting the dialogue out. Dialogue is your friend and to be used sparingly but you can supplement your meaning through the dialogue. Best of luck with your writing!

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The Mourning After short
Genre: Drama
Logline: A young mom and a carefree petrol head both suffer with personal defeat after severe losses resulting from the same tragic incident.
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Club Terrace feature
Genre: Crime,Action/Adventure
Logline: A novice contract killer, an amatuer cop and a series of events the leads them working together. This story explores the world of Australian gang crime from two perspectives with interesting conclusions.
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Without Words short
Genre: Drama
Logline: A father's struggle to finally communicate with his deaf son; to talk with his son for the first time.
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1 year ago
The Farmers short
Genre: Drama,Horror
Logline: An elderly couple confront unresolved rivalry when they receive a visit from an estranged family member.

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Club Terrace
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Genre: Crime,Action/Adventure
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A novice contract killer, an amatuer cop and a series of events the leads them working together. This story explores the world of Australian gang crime from two perspectives with interesting conclusions.

Without Words
Draft #1
Genre: Drama
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A father's struggle to finally communicate with his deaf son; to talk with his son for the first time.

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