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Here were my thoughts on your script: 1. Concept - I liked the idea of there being a surprise taking place, with us the audience not knowing if it'll be a good surprise or bad one. 2. Story - I enjoyed the story for what it was here. Mt favorite part was definitely the satisfying ending that caught me by surprise. I think the only thing that could be done to make this story better is to maybe shorten it a bit instead of having one scene drag out a bit. 3. Structure - The structuring and formatting was well done here. It was very easy to read and focus on. I don't know if it's entirely necessary to have the desk locations in the scene headings, but that's more of a nitpick. 4. Character Development - This is probably the weak point of the script since we don't know a whole lot about the characters, except for Joey the shy guy and the teacher, Nora. I'd expand on the characters a bit more so we can connect with them better! 5. Dialogue - The dialogue was pretty spot on for the most part. I would just separate the one or two instances of uninterrupted dialogue with action lines so it doesn't seem tedious. 6. Conclusion - Overall, I definitely liked this script and I'm glad I could review it. I'm not a professional, so my feedback can be taken or left however you'd like. Good job!
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