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These were my thoughts throughout the script: 1. Concept - I definitely liked the concept of a single person being physically and psychologically tormented and must find a way to escape especially since we normally get just plain old torture porn nowadays. 2. Story - I absolutely loved the story you told. To me, it felt very clear what you were telling and how you wanted it all to play out. Aside from the slightly rushed ending, the story was fantastic! 3. Structure - The formatting was mostly good, there were a couple moments where there were missing parentheticals and miswritten headings, but the script was still easy to read nonetheless. 4. Character Development - You did a nice job showing and developing each character without really relying on exposition. I liked the use of flashbacks to tell more about them, they weren't too excessive or too few. 5. Dialogue - I felt a lot of the dialogue was pretty good. At times though, there were some lines that were said by either Violet or Mother that seemed unfitting for certain situations, mainly the more intense fear tests. Aside from those, the dialogue was good. 6. Conclusion - This script managed to actually surpass my expectations! I had a blast reading this and literally couldn't stop reading it once I started. I would recommend working on making the script a bit longer to make the ending feel less rushed as well as some of the interactions during the harsher tests.
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