D Scott Mangione

Opening Credit

Reviewer Rating: N/A | Screenplays: 4 | Reviews: 2
Enjoys:
To write: Family sagas
Historical fiction
Westerns. To watch: Hard science fiction

I retired from teaching {mainly 6th-grade life science) when the time was right to finally pursue my passion. I learned the format from youtube videos then wrote my first screenplay. I was accepted into a 6-month one-on-one mentorship with Scott Myers who wrote K-9 and many others. I am now working on my 7th feature screenplay. It has been nearly impossible to get anything read so I was excited to come across this site. I will do my best to give beneficial reviews. My main goal now is to get a positive referral to a manager that leads to representation. I am ready for that and I think this site may be my best chance to make that happen.

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D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: History,Romance,Western
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: Western,History,Romance
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos. He must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Thoughts feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
D Scott Mangione completed a review for
2 months ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
Review Rating:
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.

The concept of this screenplay is creative and original. The juxtaposition of an inflatable bop clown into the role of the discovered up-and-comer makes for a nice comedy. A universe where there is nothing unusual about an inflatable toy standing in the ring with a human boxer opens up a wide array of possibilities. It was an easy read and kept me "turning the pages". The first few pages set up the situation well and were engaging. The script begins with what seems to be the inciting incident: Bruce meeting Bop. It is not clear exactly how this moment changes everything because nothing is known about the protagonist. Showing what things were like before the incident helps the reader to relate to the character. Scenes are well-written. They don't start or end too early or late. They were not too short or long. The scene descriptions were the strongest part of the script. They allow the reader to visualize the environment. The introduction to the protagonist is abrupt. Not much is given that allows the reader to empathize with the main character. A couple of pages focusing on what the "normal life" of the protagonist is like and what his goals are before meeting Bop (inciting incident) would make Bruce a more compelling character. The dialogue is done well but is in need of more conversational language: going to = gonna, want to = wanna. The concept makes it difficult to have a high level of conflict in the scenes between Bop and Bruce but you manage to show it through Bruce's words and actions. The pacing was great. No extraneous scenes. Each scene flowed in a logical order and brought a sense of expectation of what will happen next. Very good overall structure. The transitions between acts moved the story forward. The climax is not as strong as it could be which stems from the fact that the stakes were not clearly defined. If Bruce fails how bad will things get or if he succeeds what is the reward? This also affects the character arch of the protagonist. How has Bruce changed by the end of the story. There were some formatting issues. The (con'd) should not be included. It should be quite easy to get your writing program to stop adding them. Any (more)s in the dialogue should be eliminated by keeping a character's dialogue on one page.

D Scott Mangione just claimed a review for a short script
2 months ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
feature
Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
D Scott Mangione completed a review for
1 year ago
A Family Affair feature
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A Harvard-bound young man experiences a philosophical crisis during the onset of his mental illness, having a profound effect on his family.

The dialogue was natural and unique to each character. The three main characters were interesting and fairly well-developed. The conversation between Michael and Malia that begins on page 29 was the best part of the script. The story ultimately was about Malia. She was the only character who experienced growth throughout the script. A rewrite may be in order with the emphasis on Malia instead of Michael. I really like the idea of showing the effects of mental illness on the family. The theme of choosing your own life and not just copy someone else's was touched upon but coming from the one with the mental illness greatly diminished it. There was very little structure to the story. There should be more changes in direction or intensity. A good story is alternating between the protagonist coming closer to reaching their goal and then being pushed further away from their goal. Malia is the closest thing to the protagonist but she had no goals and no obstacles to overcome. The story had no antagonist. Take Malia through the hero's journey where she starts out as the orphan becomes a wanderer and then a warrior. Ultimately the protagonist becomes a martyr willing to die, literally or figuratively, to achieve their goals. Most of the scenes had a good level of conflict and a definite beginning, middle, and end but formatting problems sometimes made things a little confusing. The scenes where Michael was talking to someone who wasn't there were a little obvious. Great idea but way more effective if the reader doesn't realize it until much later. Formatting cannot be ignored and the errors were very distracting. Too many to go into. For instance, FADE IN is always, without exception, left justified. There is no slug line after the first FADE IN. No camera direction in a spec script. Only caps are when the character is mentioned the first time. The dialogue was good but a few too many speeches. The balance between dialogue and description was good. When describing action avoid "we". "Over black, we hear" really makes the reader aware of the writer. Not necessary, BLACK SCREEN then dialogue as (V.O.). A montage must have "begin montage" and "end montage" in the slug lines. Sounds and props should not be in caps. Try to be more concise. If it is already shown that Michael is waking up from a nightmare, it is not necessary to tell the reader. There is plenty to work with here. Try to take every character from A to B by showing how each character changes. Follow the correct format and structure so you can maximize the emotional response of the reader. Congratulations on completing a screenplay. Remember, writing is rewriting and this story is definitely worth rewriting. Thank you for the story, although many things had to be overlooked, overall it was an enjoyable read,

D Scott Mangione just claimed a review for a feature script
1 year ago
A Family Affair feature
Genre: Drama
A Harvard-bound young man experiences a philosophical crisis during the onset of his mental illness, having a profound effect on his family.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
1 year ago
Christmas Cards feature
Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
D Scott Mangione just joined ScriptMother!
1 year ago

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Christmas Cards
Feature

Draft #1 | Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
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1 year ago | 2 reviews | 112 pages

Thoughts
Feature

Draft #1 | Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
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2 weeks ago | reviews | 117 pages
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Draft #1 | Genre: History,Romance,Western
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
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2 weeks ago | reviews | 112 pages
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D Scott Mangione

Opening Credit

Reviewer Rating: N/A | Screenplays: 4 | Reviews: 2
Enjoys:
To write: Family sagas
Historical fiction
Westerns. To watch: Hard science fiction

I retired from teaching {mainly 6th-grade life science) when the time was right to finally pursue my passion. I learned the format from youtube videos then wrote my first screenplay. I was accepted into a 6-month one-on-one mentorship with Scott Myers who wrote K-9 and many others. I am now working on my 7th feature screenplay. It has been nearly impossible to get anything read so I was excited to come across this site. I will do my best to give beneficial reviews. My main goal now is to get a positive referral to a manager that leads to representation. I am ready for that and I think this site may be my best chance to make that happen.

Following

Screenplays

Christmas Cards
Feature

Draft #1 | Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 2 reviews | 112 pages

Thoughts
Feature

Draft #1 | Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
Rating is only available to members
2 weeks ago | reviews | 117 pages
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Draft #1 | Genre: History,Romance,Western
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
Rating is only available to members
2 weeks ago | reviews | 112 pages
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Recent Activity

D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: History,Romance,Western
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos and he must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Silence of the Land feature
Genre: Western,History,Romance
In 1834 Texas, a wealthy Mexican landholder is threatened by Anglos. He must defend his family and property from the Texas Rangers and Texas government to avoid abandoning his land.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
2 weeks ago
Thoughts feature
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Three strangers find themselves in a mysterious place surrounded by darkness. They attempt to determine why they are there only to discover a terrifying truth.
D Scott Mangione completed a review for
2 months ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
Review Rating:
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.

The concept of this screenplay is creative and original. The juxtaposition of an inflatable bop clown into the role of the discovered up-and-comer makes for a nice comedy. A universe where there is nothing unusual about an inflatable toy standing in the ring with a human boxer opens up a wide array of possibilities. It was an easy read and kept me "turning the pages". The first few pages set up the situation well and were engaging. The script begins with what seems to be the inciting incident: Bruce meeting Bop. It is not clear exactly how this moment changes everything because nothing is known about the protagonist. Showing what things were like before the incident helps the reader to relate to the character. Scenes are well-written. They don't start or end too early or late. They were not too short or long. The scene descriptions were the strongest part of the script. They allow the reader to visualize the environment. The introduction to the protagonist is abrupt. Not much is given that allows the reader to empathize with the main character. A couple of pages focusing on what the "normal life" of the protagonist is like and what his goals are before meeting Bop (inciting incident) would make Bruce a more compelling character. The dialogue is done well but is in need of more conversational language: going to = gonna, want to = wanna. The concept makes it difficult to have a high level of conflict in the scenes between Bop and Bruce but you manage to show it through Bruce's words and actions. The pacing was great. No extraneous scenes. Each scene flowed in a logical order and brought a sense of expectation of what will happen next. Very good overall structure. The transitions between acts moved the story forward. The climax is not as strong as it could be which stems from the fact that the stakes were not clearly defined. If Bruce fails how bad will things get or if he succeeds what is the reward? This also affects the character arch of the protagonist. How has Bruce changed by the end of the story. There were some formatting issues. The (con'd) should not be included. It should be quite easy to get your writing program to stop adding them. Any (more)s in the dialogue should be eliminated by keeping a character's dialogue on one page.

D Scott Mangione just claimed a review for a short script
2 months ago
Bop short
Genre: Comedy
A washed-up boxing trainer finds new hope in an unlikely protege: An inflatable bop clown.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
3 months ago
feature
Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
D Scott Mangione completed a review for
1 year ago
A Family Affair feature
Genre: Drama
Review Rating:
A Harvard-bound young man experiences a philosophical crisis during the onset of his mental illness, having a profound effect on his family.

The dialogue was natural and unique to each character. The three main characters were interesting and fairly well-developed. The conversation between Michael and Malia that begins on page 29 was the best part of the script. The story ultimately was about Malia. She was the only character who experienced growth throughout the script. A rewrite may be in order with the emphasis on Malia instead of Michael. I really like the idea of showing the effects of mental illness on the family. The theme of choosing your own life and not just copy someone else's was touched upon but coming from the one with the mental illness greatly diminished it. There was very little structure to the story. There should be more changes in direction or intensity. A good story is alternating between the protagonist coming closer to reaching their goal and then being pushed further away from their goal. Malia is the closest thing to the protagonist but she had no goals and no obstacles to overcome. The story had no antagonist. Take Malia through the hero's journey where she starts out as the orphan becomes a wanderer and then a warrior. Ultimately the protagonist becomes a martyr willing to die, literally or figuratively, to achieve their goals. Most of the scenes had a good level of conflict and a definite beginning, middle, and end but formatting problems sometimes made things a little confusing. The scenes where Michael was talking to someone who wasn't there were a little obvious. Great idea but way more effective if the reader doesn't realize it until much later. Formatting cannot be ignored and the errors were very distracting. Too many to go into. For instance, FADE IN is always, without exception, left justified. There is no slug line after the first FADE IN. No camera direction in a spec script. Only caps are when the character is mentioned the first time. The dialogue was good but a few too many speeches. The balance between dialogue and description was good. When describing action avoid "we". "Over black, we hear" really makes the reader aware of the writer. Not necessary, BLACK SCREEN then dialogue as (V.O.). A montage must have "begin montage" and "end montage" in the slug lines. Sounds and props should not be in caps. Try to be more concise. If it is already shown that Michael is waking up from a nightmare, it is not necessary to tell the reader. There is plenty to work with here. Try to take every character from A to B by showing how each character changes. Follow the correct format and structure so you can maximize the emotional response of the reader. Congratulations on completing a screenplay. Remember, writing is rewriting and this story is definitely worth rewriting. Thank you for the story, although many things had to be overlooked, overall it was an enjoyable read,

D Scott Mangione just claimed a review for a feature script
1 year ago
A Family Affair feature
Genre: Drama
A Harvard-bound young man experiences a philosophical crisis during the onset of his mental illness, having a profound effect on his family.
D Scott Mangione uploaded a feature screenplay
1 year ago
Christmas Cards feature
Genre: Family
When his father is rendered unable to work, an imaginative young boy sets out to sell Christmas cards to raise money and help his poor family celebrate the holidays.
D Scott Mangione just joined ScriptMother!
1 year ago