Timothy Boissey

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Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 17 | Reviews: 11

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Timothy Boissey uploaded a television screenplay
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The Ding-Ling Bro's tv series
Genre: Action/Adventure,Comedy
Two hapless twenty-something's enter the world of amateur wrestling to fulfill a family wish.
Timothy Boissey uploaded a short screenplay
1 week ago
Natural Enemy short
Genre: Comedy,Horror
A bizarre date leads to a severe allergy attack.
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feature
Genre: Western
Dalton has everything taken from him in a single day then rides out to start over only to end up in a town under attack by possessed Indians.
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Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
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Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
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Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Family
Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
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feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
Timothy Boissey completed a review for
3 weeks ago
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Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
Review Rating:
Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.

The story isn't that clear. Is the story about Carrie who seems to be the main character, or is the story about The Understudy, who drives the story forward? It wasn't very clear to me what Carrie wanted, she didn't seem to grow or develop much, the character just does not arc. The story is also not very believable. One week at a musical summer camp isn't enough time to rehearse and put on a show to the level that the character Mr. Sylus describes. Carrie is homeschooled but knows Tristan without any explanation. Tristan dies and none of the other kids parents show up to take their kids home, the police change their mind on whether or not to close down the camp with no logical or legal reason why. It doesn't seem believable to me that a few teenagers would go blindly into the night trying to catch a killer, and it's also hard to believe that no adults would be interested in catching the killer either. Two more kids die and the killer is caught but not arrested, he just goes to the hospital and is allowed to go home and recover from his wounds as if he was a victim too? There's no way that someone who committed a double homicide would be allowed to go home free. The only goal that the campers seemed to have was just to make the week of camp nice and special, there are no stakes. What happens if camp gets shut down? What happens if the week is as special as they want it to be? Who cares? There's almost a Phantom of the Opera-like theme to this story that I really enjoyed, I wish that the characters and their goals were expressed, more prominent, and more urgent. The camp setting is iconic and very fun, it's a really rich environment that has a ton of capabilities for story-telling. I didn't like how quickly we jumped into the characters, or the lack of description given to them. The characters just show up, with no real purpose, and really they suffer no real consequences (except for the 2 that die). I didn't understand the scene between Mr. Sylus and Ms. Nancy and why they hook up. It seems superfluous and awkward. The dialogue needs a lot of work. Every character sounds the same, there are no affectations, there's no slang, and they don't sound like real people. The character's voice and speech should be as unique as their appearance. The killer gets to go free, that ending doesn't sit well. The killer goes free for no reason, and there's no investigation, no consequences for killing two people, no resolution. The ending needs major work.

Timothy Boissey just claimed a review for a feature script
3 weeks ago
Perform (Rough Draft) feature
Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.
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3 weeks ago
feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.

Screenplays

Draft #1 | Genre: Family
When 12-year-old MODEST helps his friend ANSEL(12) escape the clutches of his drunken uncle, they lose each other in the mysterious redwood forest, where each of them sets off on a wild adventure in the hopes of reuniting.
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1 year ago | 2 reviews | 119 pages

Uncle Buddy
Feature

Draft #4 | Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
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2 months ago | reviews | 109 pages
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Second Star
Feature

Draft #3 | Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Family
Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
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3 weeks ago | reviews | 121 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Thriller
Auguste runs away from home to avoid growing up and does the one thing no child should ever do.
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1 year ago | 2 reviews | 7 pages

Undead Nation
Feature

Draft #2 | Genre: Western
Dalton has everything taken from him in a single day then rides out to start over only to end up in a town under attack by possessed Indians.
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1 year ago | reviews | 84 pages

Rest Stop
Short

Draft #1 | Genre: Mystery/Suspense
Two criminals come to the end of their run.
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1 year ago | 1 reviews | 9 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Crime,Mystery/Suspense
A dangerous dinner event is run by two lovers, each with their own agenda.
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1 year ago | 1 reviews | 8 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Horror,Thriller,Comedy
Time-traveling, temporal disturbances, alien abductions, or something darker?
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1 year ago | reviews | 56 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Comedy,Horror
A bizarre date leads to a severe allergy attack.
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1 week ago | reviews | 12 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Action/Adventure,Comedy
Two hapless twenty-something's enter the world of amateur wrestling to fulfill a family wish.
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1 week ago | reviews | 41 pages
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Reviews

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1 year ago | 5 reviews | 23 pages

Need
Short

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1 year ago | 2 reviews | 6 pages
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1 year ago | 4 reviews | 10 pages

8 Bits
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3 months ago | 3 reviews | 88 pages
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2 months ago | 2 reviews | 65 pages
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Timothy Boissey

Opening Credit

Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 17 | Reviews: 11

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Following

Screenplays

Draft #1 | Genre: Family
When 12-year-old MODEST helps his friend ANSEL(12) escape the clutches of his drunken uncle, they lose each other in the mysterious redwood forest, where each of them sets off on a wild adventure in the hopes of reuniting.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 2 reviews | 119 pages

Uncle Buddy
Feature

Draft #4 | Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
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2 months ago | reviews | 109 pages
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Second Star
Feature

Draft #3 | Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Family
Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
Rating is only available to members
3 weeks ago | reviews | 121 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Thriller
Auguste runs away from home to avoid growing up and does the one thing no child should ever do.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 2 reviews | 7 pages

Undead Nation
Feature

Draft #2 | Genre: Western
Dalton has everything taken from him in a single day then rides out to start over only to end up in a town under attack by possessed Indians.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | reviews | 84 pages

Rest Stop
Short

Draft #1 | Genre: Mystery/Suspense
Two criminals come to the end of their run.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 1 reviews | 9 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Crime,Mystery/Suspense
A dangerous dinner event is run by two lovers, each with their own agenda.
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 1 reviews | 8 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Horror,Thriller,Comedy
Time-traveling, temporal disturbances, alien abductions, or something darker?
Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | reviews | 56 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Comedy,Horror
A bizarre date leads to a severe allergy attack.
Rating is only available to members
1 week ago | reviews | 12 pages
Draft #1 | Genre: Action/Adventure,Comedy
Two hapless twenty-something's enter the world of amateur wrestling to fulfill a family wish.
Rating is only available to members
1 week ago | reviews | 41 pages
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Reviews

Rating is only available to members
1 year ago | 5 reviews | 23 pages

Need
Short

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1 year ago | 2 reviews | 6 pages
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1 year ago | 4 reviews | 10 pages

8 Bits
Feature

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3 months ago | 3 reviews | 88 pages
Rating is only available to members
2 months ago | 2 reviews | 65 pages
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Recent Activity

Timothy Boissey uploaded a television screenplay
1 week ago
The Ding-Ling Bro's tv series
Genre: Action/Adventure,Comedy
Two hapless twenty-something's enter the world of amateur wrestling to fulfill a family wish.
Timothy Boissey uploaded a short screenplay
1 week ago
Natural Enemy short
Genre: Comedy,Horror
A bizarre date leads to a severe allergy attack.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
1 week ago
feature
Genre: Western
Dalton has everything taken from him in a single day then rides out to start over only to end up in a town under attack by possessed Indians.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
1 week ago
feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Family
Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
1 week ago
feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
1 week ago
feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Family
Under the greatest threat of its existence Neverland cries out for a new hero, and she's bringing friends.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
1 week ago
feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.
Timothy Boissey completed a review for
3 weeks ago
Perform (Rough Draft) feature
Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
Review Rating:
Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.

The story isn't that clear. Is the story about Carrie who seems to be the main character, or is the story about The Understudy, who drives the story forward? It wasn't very clear to me what Carrie wanted, she didn't seem to grow or develop much, the character just does not arc. The story is also not very believable. One week at a musical summer camp isn't enough time to rehearse and put on a show to the level that the character Mr. Sylus describes. Carrie is homeschooled but knows Tristan without any explanation. Tristan dies and none of the other kids parents show up to take their kids home, the police change their mind on whether or not to close down the camp with no logical or legal reason why. It doesn't seem believable to me that a few teenagers would go blindly into the night trying to catch a killer, and it's also hard to believe that no adults would be interested in catching the killer either. Two more kids die and the killer is caught but not arrested, he just goes to the hospital and is allowed to go home and recover from his wounds as if he was a victim too? There's no way that someone who committed a double homicide would be allowed to go home free. The only goal that the campers seemed to have was just to make the week of camp nice and special, there are no stakes. What happens if camp gets shut down? What happens if the week is as special as they want it to be? Who cares? There's almost a Phantom of the Opera-like theme to this story that I really enjoyed, I wish that the characters and their goals were expressed, more prominent, and more urgent. The camp setting is iconic and very fun, it's a really rich environment that has a ton of capabilities for story-telling. I didn't like how quickly we jumped into the characters, or the lack of description given to them. The characters just show up, with no real purpose, and really they suffer no real consequences (except for the 2 that die). I didn't understand the scene between Mr. Sylus and Ms. Nancy and why they hook up. It seems superfluous and awkward. The dialogue needs a lot of work. Every character sounds the same, there are no affectations, there's no slang, and they don't sound like real people. The character's voice and speech should be as unique as their appearance. The killer gets to go free, that ending doesn't sit well. The killer goes free for no reason, and there's no investigation, no consequences for killing two people, no resolution. The ending needs major work.

Timothy Boissey just claimed a review for a feature script
3 weeks ago
Perform (Rough Draft) feature
Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
Carrie's week is going miserably and camp doesn't seem to help. Neither does the fact that there's a killer loose on the campgrounds hellbent on being remembered by his childhood bullies.
A review was just purchased for a feature script. Claim it here.
3 weeks ago
feature
Genre: Action/Adventure
Pursued by deadly space kittens, the cosmos’s most notorious idiot and his nephew find a hidden stash of weed during their efforts to save the last members of a dying race of alien pugs.