This movie really does a good job with the social commentary sprinkled throughout the script, which is great as it adds on to the character's struggles and show what they go through. How the film changes tones throughout the movie about Trey wanting to get his job and ends with him dying really makes an impact on the viewer who watches the movie. The struggles of the protagonist and all of the other characters are done very well, making us emote for them and root for them throughout the film. The social commentary, strong characters, and the conflict presented throughout the story are well done and makes this movie interesting to watch. However, there are some issues with the movie regarding how it is told. One problem is how there seems to be no conflict in the beginning of the script, or nothing engaging, which could turn away an audience and make them somewhat bored. A good piece of advice is to introduce some kind of conflict or engage the audience with comedy, but since you're going for something more dramatic and emotional, I would recommend sticking with the former. Another problem with the movie is the dialogue used throughout the screenplay. It's not the dialogue itself, but how it is being told. Please take my advice with a grain of salt as I am probably not the best person to judge this, but there is a lot of slang in the movie which could be seen by others as stereotypical or offensive. Overall, the screenplay is very strong and emotional.
The concept for the film is original, and very amazing. I like the entire concept of the experiments and the vacation, and the truth about what surprise the protagonists are really in for. The characters, while somewhat cliched, are pretty interesting and really give life to the screenplay in general. The author is very imaginative and finds various ways to scare the protagonists and the audience while trying to find a way for our protagonists to come out on top. The intro is also very well done, with Donna being attacked by the wild animal to foreshadow the terror that our protagonists will later face. The author uses the creative premise to the screenplay to its advantage to deliver something cool. However, there are some criticisms I have throughout the story. The characters of Jason and Deacon feel too similar to one another, there is no distinguishing features of characteristics that set the two apart. Another problem I have with the screenplay is that while it is exciting, it doesn't look like it has any character development. The protagonists don't seem to change how they act one way or another throughout the film, and mostly focus on getting out of the lab alive. While the film is exciting, stories like these need character development because relying on an exciting premise alone won't really be impactful for an audience - otherwise people who don't like the story's outcome really won't have anything to come back on without the development of the characters throughout the film.
The script was great. The characters were mostly likeable and interesting, with multiple dimensions added to their layers. One example of this is Eric, who is somewhat shy, but also very skilled in scrip-writing. Other characters like Casey, Heather, and Carnelia are also pretty interesting and have a lot of depth that really makes them stand out. The Hollywood setting is also very intriguing and shows a great glimpse of star life and how the people interact with one another. I like the character development that Eric goes through and how he grows as a character, with him recognizing his flaws. How the other character handle their flaws also work out pretty well. The characters are pretty fun to listen to and understand. However, the script is not devoid of problems. The mystery of Carnelia, while intriguing, doesn't really come up a lot in the script and how the characters develop. It would be interesting to see how the characters deal with her loss. This episode is a lot like Riverdale, where they intertwine the mystery with the development of the characters, but the mystery overall doesn't have a big impact on the characters that the screenplay focuses a majority of their time on. I think in order for this to work, you have to establish the relationship between Carnelia and the other characters in order to make it relevant to the overall story. The characters and their arcs are all interesting to go through, but you really need to work on the "thriller" aspect of it.
This film has very interesting ideas about tackling mature themes. I like how you try to include themes about sexual harassment and gender identity, when Carol tries to do things that are typically masculine. In fact, Carol is an interesting female character, someone that is tomboyish, energetic, yet naïve. You did a good job writing Carol and portraying the female experience. However, the rest of the story falls flat with its very inconsistent tone and pacing. There is no central conflict or problem that ties the entire story together, almost like they are multiple separate shorts that are all combined into one movie. One moment, Carol is being sexually harassed, and the next moment, she's snitching on her brother for stealing candy, which are inconsistent in tone and conflict and have no relation to one another. This is problematic as a feature film as usually, the scenes have to be connected to tell a central narrative, which this film fails to accomplish. The multiple events in the film don't tie together well or make an impact on the character in any shape or form. The film seems to want to tackle many mature issues, but doesn't stick to one simple story and tells the story of a girl growing up, without any central theme or conflict. Some of the mature themes also aren't presented well, like Carol not telling about the sexual harassment and calling a suicide right, which can send bad messages to the audience. The way the film tries to combine so many ideas into one feature film without any narrative to combine them together makes it a bad film, despite all the good ideas. However, telling multiple different stories with the same characters could work if you made it a TV show akin to "As Told By Ginger" and "Malcolm in the Middle". This would really help develop the characters as well as take the time to tackle these kind of themes. There are many good ideas, but there is a poor structure and lack of story that really makes the whole thing fall flat.
Booksy, an introverted bear, must choose between remaining isolated from a seemingly cruel world or saving an innocent chipmunk's life