jonfenroyer

Aspiring Screenwriter

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Reviews: 1

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jonfenroyer completed a review for
8 months ago
Jé Rouge short
Genre: Horror
Review Rating:
An older sister cries wolf to terrify her younger brother, but she quickly comes to realize that there may actually be something to be afraid of.

As to the originality of the concept, it seems familiar but I can't recall any specific story, probably just the element of the victim-is-actually-the-bad-guy twist. It has a Tales from the Crypt feel to it, both in style and length. I predicted the ending, probably because of that. The dialogue is a little bland and the characters a little shallow. I know it's a short, but some more banter between the siblings might add to the tension and give the situation and characters a little more depth. The conflict seems minor compared to the consequences. I think the flow between the scenes is good, and the scene lengths feel appropriate in proportion to the script length. The pacing seems appropriate in that respect as well. I was wavering back and forth between liking the last line of dialogue and wondering if it was too corny and takes away from the horror. Consider losing it as seeing how it hits you. Either way it works, but it definitely changes the feel of the scene. In fact, losing it actually takes away from the Tales from the Crypt feeling of the story; keeping it makes it more Tales-y.

8 months ago
8 reviews
7 pages
jonfenroyer just claimed a review for a short script
8 months ago
Jé Rouge short
Genre: Horror
An older sister cries wolf to terrify her younger brother, but she quickly comes to realize that there may actually be something to be afraid of.
8 months ago
8 reviews
7 pages
jonfenroyer just joined ScriptMother!
8 months ago

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jonfenroyer

Aspiring Screenwriter

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Screenplays: 0
Reviews: 1

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Reviews

Jé Rouge
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8 months ago | 8 reviews | 7 pages
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Jé Rouge
Short

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8 months ago | 8 reviews | 7 pages
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jonfenroyer completed a review for
8 months ago
Jé Rouge short
Genre: Horror
Review Rating:
An older sister cries wolf to terrify her younger brother, but she quickly comes to realize that there may actually be something to be afraid of.

As to the originality of the concept, it seems familiar but I can't recall any specific story, probably just the element of the victim-is-actually-the-bad-guy twist. It has a Tales from the Crypt feel to it, both in style and length. I predicted the ending, probably because of that. The dialogue is a little bland and the characters a little shallow. I know it's a short, but some more banter between the siblings might add to the tension and give the situation and characters a little more depth. The conflict seems minor compared to the consequences. I think the flow between the scenes is good, and the scene lengths feel appropriate in proportion to the script length. The pacing seems appropriate in that respect as well. I was wavering back and forth between liking the last line of dialogue and wondering if it was too corny and takes away from the horror. Consider losing it as seeing how it hits you. Either way it works, but it definitely changes the feel of the scene. In fact, losing it actually takes away from the Tales from the Crypt feeling of the story; keeping it makes it more Tales-y.

8 months ago
8 reviews
7 pages
jonfenroyer just claimed a review for a short script
8 months ago
Jé Rouge short
Genre: Horror
An older sister cries wolf to terrify her younger brother, but she quickly comes to realize that there may actually be something to be afraid of.
8 months ago
8 reviews
7 pages
jonfenroyer just joined ScriptMother!
8 months ago