Chukwuma Amobi
Aspiring Screenwriter
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I finished in Biochemistry from the University of Nigeria in Awka Anambra state Nigeria. I have written other screenplays like: (1) "SO FAR AWAY"(Nollywood's first one man cast film starring Segun Arinze only) (2) "JUST SAY YES"(Produced by PSI multimedia in Lagos Nigeria) (3) "GUTSY GIRL"(Optioned to PSI multimedia in Lagos Nigeria) (4) "OBLIVION"(Written for Ndave productions in Awka Anambra state Nigeria) I love to explore new grounds so hit me up if you need an awesome screenplay written for you. Cheers...
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Concept is good but could be made better. The script certainly started well. It hooked me but as it progresses, its shortcomings creeps in and that is just the shortcomings of the writer. The dialogue is good but could be better. The action/description is nice but could be made better. The protagonists are interesting. Bruce and Bop clown are outstanding but a few things are out of place in them. It's a comedy script, I get it. It's something no one thought of, I get it. But keep an open mind on this, why would Bruce decide to train a bop clown for anything? Seeing that it could take a hit is just not enough reason. What happened to it before the preteens started beating it? Does it posses anything special? If so, what is it? Or is Bruce seeing things in his head? This is just food for thought. The climax is good.
Concept is good. The first page of the script is not so good. It made me want to drop it. The action lines are good but could be better. The dialogue... Well, no one wants to read a giant wall of text. Keep it short most of the time. If it has to be long, make it 5 lines. 7 max. The protagonist seems interesting but you didn't show how interesting he is. Think up more ways to do that. The climax is not good.
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Chukwuma Amobi
Aspiring Screenwriter
Short Bio
I finished in Biochemistry from the University of Nigeria in Awka Anambra state Nigeria. I have written other screenplays like: (1) "SO FAR AWAY"(Nollywood's first one man cast film starring Segun Arinze only) (2) "JUST SAY YES"(Produced by PSI multimedia in Lagos Nigeria) (3) "GUTSY GIRL"(Optioned to PSI multimedia in Lagos Nigeria) (4) "OBLIVION"(Written for Ndave productions in Awka Anambra state Nigeria) I love to explore new grounds so hit me up if you need an awesome screenplay written for you. Cheers...
Screenplays
Reviews
Recent Activity
Concept is good but could be made better. The script certainly started well. It hooked me but as it progresses, its shortcomings creeps in and that is just the shortcomings of the writer. The dialogue is good but could be better. The action/description is nice but could be made better. The protagonists are interesting. Bruce and Bop clown are outstanding but a few things are out of place in them. It's a comedy script, I get it. It's something no one thought of, I get it. But keep an open mind on this, why would Bruce decide to train a bop clown for anything? Seeing that it could take a hit is just not enough reason. What happened to it before the preteens started beating it? Does it posses anything special? If so, what is it? Or is Bruce seeing things in his head? This is just food for thought. The climax is good.
Concept is good. The first page of the script is not so good. It made me want to drop it. The action lines are good but could be better. The dialogue... Well, no one wants to read a giant wall of text. Keep it short most of the time. If it has to be long, make it 5 lines. 7 max. The protagonist seems interesting but you didn't show how interesting he is. Think up more ways to do that. The climax is not good.