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Kwesi Lewis

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Fantasy
Horror
Supernatural
Psychological Thriller

I am a currently a student at the National School of Theater Arts & Drama in Georgetown Guyana finishing up a diploma in Theater Arts and Creative writing. Creativity and a strong imagination have always been the things that makes me the most proud about myself. I'm a very unassuming guy, just another face in the crowd. But given the chance, watch me do something extraordinary


Reviewer Rating:
Scripts: 4
Reviews: 6

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Angels Can Die television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Horror
Logline: A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.
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Angels Can Die television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Horror
Logline: A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.
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THE MISSION short
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Logline: Callista is teamed up with Bentry on the planet Jupiter and everything seems normal, for now.
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Hell's Ecstasy short
Genre: Horror
Logline: Barry and his friends are ready for a great bachelor party until it goes beyond ecstasy.
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James Bond 007-Long Love Lost short
Genre: Action/Adventure,Mystery/Suspense,Drama
Logline: Bond has a wild adventure ahead of him with his arch nemesis Blofeld.
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Angels Can Die television
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Horror
Logline: A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.
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5 months ago
Small Time Villains television
Genre: Comedy,Action/Adventure
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I must commend you on making me laugh several times while reading your script. I think you have a wonderful sense of humor and good comedic timing. The concept for your story is freshly told from the perspective of people that society would want to throw in jail. You make the crooks very likable characters and all three of them work really well together. I really enjoyed reading your script, i read it in one sitting. The unique way you tell the story is unlike anything I have ever seen before and your creativity with the various superpowers is very refreshing and sometimes comedic, which of course is your intention. What I would warn you about is your script formatting. It is not to industry standards. Please format it as soon as possible so that when the right person sees your work they can actually produce your script. In its current format, your script is not quite production ready. you can use free screenwriting software like Trelby and KIT Scenarist to format your script properly. The story is too good to not have it in the correct format. Also you have a few camera directions in your script which I must say are very impressive and don't interrupt the flow of the story at all. But just know that directors don't like it when we writers tell them how to do their jobs by including camera directions and so on in our script. some script readers might refuse to read your script further when they see your first camera direction. To be on the safe side I suggest you leave the camera directions out of your story even though I don't see them as problematic in the way you use them. Also beware of your exposition, especially when we are first introduced to the trio. They are blurting out their life stories to each other in an unrealistic way. Basically they are telling each other things that they should already know, the only reason why they are saying those things is for us the audience to understand a bit of their backstory. Doing it in that way is bad exposition. I struggle with that problem myself. I love Trent's character but be cautious with him. He can quickly become annoying to the audience if every other thing he says is basically something stupid. At first it seems funny but then it can get overbearing. Balance him well, yes he says and does stupid things but don't have him be that way every three lines. I see no mistakes with your grammar or spelling but try your best to stay in the active voice present tense a lit bit more. My one concern however is your story engine. Can your concept stretch for 3 seasons or more before the audience becomes bored? Your pilot episode doesn't have enough going on for me to see multiple seasons from it. Maybe as the show progresses the concept will get bigger with greater stakes, there is only so much that you can cram into a half hour after all. But let me say again, I really enjoyed reading your script. It was entertaining from start to finish. You have a lot of talent and I really would like to see your show on Netflix or one of those streaming platforms one day. But you have to work hard for it. Enter this script into screenwriting contests and push for representation so that you can actually have the show produced. I believe the concept is good enough. But you have to fix the things I told you about before you take it to that level or else no one will take your script seriously in the industry. I am officially your first fan! Good Luck!