mike harper

Transformational Arc

Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 42 | Reviews: 32
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I'm just a simple man. I work, I raise six sons, and I love my island wife hard. I go day by day fighting off the specter of battles both from my youth in Chicago to the battlefields in the Middle East. I abide by strong Catholic Christian core beliefs to love and accept even the folks that I'd want to throw piranas in their face and let their bodies lie in a pool filled with killer vampire gummi bears. I am nowhere near an aspiring writer nor want to enter the fray of the film industry. I would just like to one day see something on the big screen and say the same thing I did in countless places around the world...I made that. =) I have a hidden hobby of screenplay writing or jotting down creative ideas that may one day be passed along or found in a glass bottle floating in the sea. If by chance money can come my way from a poor script, I would be satisfied. As much as one can be swinging in a hammock by the side of the beach on a warm day with a cold glass of iced tea in hand. Thus, I am a simple man. Honor, noble, and a side of wickedness that comes out from time to time to keep life interesting and not boring.

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Mage's Price feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Everything has a cost. Real magic is different. Magic breaks the laws of the world. Jesse is soon to find out the mage's price.
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They Never Left feature
Genre: Drama,Comedy,Horror
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After being dumped by his girlfriend, a down-on-his-luck alcoholic moves into an unusually affordable NYC apartment only to find out that the previous tenant isn't quite ready to leave – despite dying three years ago.

Overall, the script is well-formatted and follows the plot beats pretty good. t may be my own sense of humor, but I did not relate to any comedic tropes you attempted. I don't want to nit-pick this work because I can tell you spent a lot of hours and hard work to make this comes to life. Pun intended. I suggest looking for the screenplays for "Apartment 1303" (Japanese version and the 2007 film based on STephen King's short story "1408". Bizzare events, dramatic beats, character dialogue and horror aspects would assist you in pulling the tropes and thematic elements into the script. I'm not saying it's not good, just that it can use a bit more unpredictability and help with the ending, which a horror fan like myself predicted. Some of my initial items in the first 10 pages are: pg 1. Action line suggest remove the word Neat. Combine "Immaculately clean and organized." It reads a double stating the description. No need to restate this type of music. Streamline the action to, "An Antique RECORD PLAYER plays a vinyl. It spins hypnotically beneath the needle." Do people leave lipstick in the medicine cabinet or on the sink counter? Just asking because my personal experience has been the countertop. Marching = Marches How does he kick the chair if he stands on it? Tip it over, maybe? Great introduction to Darwin. I think you can give a couple of sentences to bring Madeline and Ed motivation or thematic life. As it is, they feel more as supporting characters that are 2-dimensional. The paranormal question from Scotty came out of nowhere. I think even buzzed Darwin would have reacted stronger at such an odd question and seeing FRANK in the closet.

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They Never Left feature
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After being dumped by his girlfriend, a down-on-his-luck alcoholic moves into an unusually affordable NYC apartment only to find out that the previous tenant isn't quite ready to leave – despite dying three years ago.
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Brother Margaret feature
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On the night of a blood moon, an undead monk comes to a shopping mall to revenge himself upon his vampiric kin.

First, this is an interesting concept. A vampire family reunion who were all in a holy religious sect. The formatting of the script is well done. The dialogue was brief, did not go too far into expository, and kept the flow of the plot going. I did not see any spelling nor grammar errors. In the first 15 pages, all I garnered was that Margaret has returned after a centuries long absence to kill his family. They are all vampires. The reasoning why after all these years he's chosen to kill his family, unaware of the blood moon and the resurrection ceremony, was unclear. Through bits of scenes, Margaret's history with their mother is told. How all of them have rosaries handcrafted from their mother. However, there wasn't much for a reader to be empathetic or emotionally invested in any of the characters. They read as two-dimensional. The teenagers were generic, Catherine being pregnant was not enough to help feel for her in a vampire feast. I would suggest taking a look at the following sources for a bit of guidance for the characters. Stranger Things for the teenagers. (https://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/STRANGER-THINGS-1x01-The-Vanishing-of-Will-Byers-2ND-PINK.pdf) From Dusk Till Dawn for character development and thrall action. (http://www.quentintarantino.de/download/from_dusk_till_dawn_screenplay.pdf) The Lost Boys for plot beat and character development. (http://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/TheLostBoys.htm) Near Dark for the scene setting. (http://www.horrorlair.com/scripts/Near-Dark.pdf) Thirst for more flushing out Margaet's backstory and his turmoil to hold onto his humanity and belief system. (http://www.screenplaydb.com/film/scripts/thirst20080104/) Your screenplay does read as if you are avoiding the tropes from the Twilight series and Underworld. However, in a sated genre as vampire lore, make sure you don't just have thrall gore and fight-for-your life scenes all the time. It will make the viewer weary. Get into the headspace of Margaret. I can tell you were leaving the origin of their father and the death of their mother ambiguous to keep us invested in the story. I would suggest you subvert the vampire genre. I suggest also giving us visual expressions to key us on the protagonist and antagonist's inner thoughts. Are they fearful? Angry? Lustful? Blood crave? I would recommend watching “Let the Right One In” (Tomas Alfredson, 2008) to get a sense of foreboding, and the nature of a vampire in real society. You should explain how pages from a Bible is able to trap or bind a vampire. I can tell you spent blood, sweat, and tears on this script. Good job. Look forward to your next one!

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Mage's Price feature
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Angels Can Die tv series
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A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.

This has some promise to it. I would suggest you provide more for an audience to know who Silas is as a man/priest. I didn't feel empathy for him until halfway through and then I felt lost at the revelation at the end of the pilot. I recommend reading http://www.usccb.org/prayer-and-worship/sacraments-and-sacramentals/sacramentals-blessings/exorcism.cfm to provide more context to the Rite of Roman Catholic Exorcism. There could have been more interaction with Silas and the other characters. There were elements in the story that made me think of the short story by Michelle West, "To Speak with Angels" originally published in the anthology book Villians Victorious, 2001. I know tv pilots are challenging and I can see you put some sweat into your keyboard to build this story. Do you plan an ensemble cast? How do you want the world to be built? Where are we headed, the angel's city? What unanswered questions do you want to tantalize us to drive us to watch the next episode? An example is The Walking Dead pilot. Don't feel the need to answer questions right off the bat. Let us simmer on who Sam is. build him to be a manipulative, shady character. Is he a minor demon or the King of Hell? Drip nuggets of foreshadowing by how Sam may or may not know the demons that possess the people. The mysterious mark on Silas, how did he hide it as a child from Father Malcolm or the Sister? Create an episode built on horror-action from an entirely unfamiliar world or one we all recognize. You populated your world within the City of Light but build it to be a gritty realm where not all angels are the vibrant glorious and holy beings we recognize. This could be a "suburb" of Heaven. Not purgatory, but not Heaven either. Angels assigned here should be the Host that were assigned to monitor the exiles from the First War and the Fallen Ones (angels that have not become demons but became corrupted). This takes a toll on these angelic police corp. I'd recommend looking at making the realm bleak and filter the world through either Beatrice or Silas's eyes. As for Sam, set him up as maybe an imaginary character Silas believes he made up in his mind. Silas doesn't act like your typical Catholic Priest because maybe in his background he was an alcoholic or had some type of addiction (drugs, sex, gambling, etc) but Father Malcolm rescued him. Silas copes with his duties and Sam in some hidden way. Maybe the Nun has hidden feelings for Silas? Or Sam slips in and out of Silas without his knowledge and "Sam passed Silas" and the Nun have been intimate or having an affair, thus corrupting the nun, allowing her to be passed by the minor demon. All a ruse to isolate Silas and manipulate him to become exposed. But how does an amnesiac angel become branded with the sigil to control a Demon King? How about building Silas up to be a child of a Nephilim that has been in hiding since the Days of the Flood? Sam's intentions are more nefarious than anyone realizes. Is Sam to be the series or season "Big Bad" or is this series to be the Game of Thrones trope that no one is polarized good or bad, everyone is gray. There is a lot of potential in this story. Make sure you flow your plot beats to your story arc. Take a look at the "Dark Arl" comic book series written by Cullen Bunn. You can go to GetComics and download it for free. All you need is a CBR file reader. This can give you some backstory ideas for the whole story. Take a look at the "Hexed" comic book series by Michael Alan Nelson. ou can go to GetComics and download it for free. All you need is a CBR file reader. This can give you some backstory ideas for Beatrice. Take a look at the (1995) movie, "The Prophecy" - The angel Gabriel comes to Earth to collect a soul which will end the stalemated war in Heaven, and only a former priest and a little girl can stop him. In your television series, is this along the lines of what you're seeking with the King of Hell vs the City of Angels police force?

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Angels Can Die tv series
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Mia doesn't know it, but she's the last of the 36 righteous women that hold back God's wrath on humankind.
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mike harper

Transformational Arc

Reviewer Rating: | Screenplays: 42 | Reviews: 32
Enjoys:
sci-fi
romance
action
horror
fantasy

I'm just a simple man. I work, I raise six sons, and I love my island wife hard. I go day by day fighting off the specter of battles both from my youth in Chicago to the battlefields in the Middle East. I abide by strong Catholic Christian core beliefs to love and accept even the folks that I'd want to throw piranas in their face and let their bodies lie in a pool filled with killer vampire gummi bears. I am nowhere near an aspiring writer nor want to enter the fray of the film industry. I would just like to one day see something on the big screen and say the same thing I did in countless places around the world...I made that. =) I have a hidden hobby of screenplay writing or jotting down creative ideas that may one day be passed along or found in a glass bottle floating in the sea. If by chance money can come my way from a poor script, I would be satisfied. As much as one can be swinging in a hammock by the side of the beach on a warm day with a cold glass of iced tea in hand. Thus, I am a simple man. Honor, noble, and a side of wickedness that comes out from time to time to keep life interesting and not boring.

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On an Pan-Pacific flight, a supernatural creature plague passengers. They soon discover that this was a prelude to something much worse to come.
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A husband and wife fight to reunite after their starship crashes. That maybe the least of humanity's trouble.
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They were once sentinels to protect humanity. That era is over. The werewolf apocalypse has begun.
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Aberrant
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Journey
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Henry and Hope are thrust into a journey of wonders and dangers as they shrink through the quantum multi-universe wondering if they will make it back home.
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The First Mage
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mike harper uploaded a feature screenplay
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Mage's Price feature
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy
Everything has a cost. Real magic is different. Magic breaks the laws of the world. Jesse is soon to find out the mage's price.
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16 hours ago
They Never Left feature
Genre: Drama,Comedy,Horror
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After being dumped by his girlfriend, a down-on-his-luck alcoholic moves into an unusually affordable NYC apartment only to find out that the previous tenant isn't quite ready to leave – despite dying three years ago.

Overall, the script is well-formatted and follows the plot beats pretty good. t may be my own sense of humor, but I did not relate to any comedic tropes you attempted. I don't want to nit-pick this work because I can tell you spent a lot of hours and hard work to make this comes to life. Pun intended. I suggest looking for the screenplays for "Apartment 1303" (Japanese version and the 2007 film based on STephen King's short story "1408". Bizzare events, dramatic beats, character dialogue and horror aspects would assist you in pulling the tropes and thematic elements into the script. I'm not saying it's not good, just that it can use a bit more unpredictability and help with the ending, which a horror fan like myself predicted. Some of my initial items in the first 10 pages are: pg 1. Action line suggest remove the word Neat. Combine "Immaculately clean and organized." It reads a double stating the description. No need to restate this type of music. Streamline the action to, "An Antique RECORD PLAYER plays a vinyl. It spins hypnotically beneath the needle." Do people leave lipstick in the medicine cabinet or on the sink counter? Just asking because my personal experience has been the countertop. Marching = Marches How does he kick the chair if he stands on it? Tip it over, maybe? Great introduction to Darwin. I think you can give a couple of sentences to bring Madeline and Ed motivation or thematic life. As it is, they feel more as supporting characters that are 2-dimensional. The paranormal question from Scotty came out of nowhere. I think even buzzed Darwin would have reacted stronger at such an odd question and seeing FRANK in the closet.

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They Never Left feature
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After being dumped by his girlfriend, a down-on-his-luck alcoholic moves into an unusually affordable NYC apartment only to find out that the previous tenant isn't quite ready to leave – despite dying three years ago.
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Brother Margaret feature
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On the night of a blood moon, an undead monk comes to a shopping mall to revenge himself upon his vampiric kin.

First, this is an interesting concept. A vampire family reunion who were all in a holy religious sect. The formatting of the script is well done. The dialogue was brief, did not go too far into expository, and kept the flow of the plot going. I did not see any spelling nor grammar errors. In the first 15 pages, all I garnered was that Margaret has returned after a centuries long absence to kill his family. They are all vampires. The reasoning why after all these years he's chosen to kill his family, unaware of the blood moon and the resurrection ceremony, was unclear. Through bits of scenes, Margaret's history with their mother is told. How all of them have rosaries handcrafted from their mother. However, there wasn't much for a reader to be empathetic or emotionally invested in any of the characters. They read as two-dimensional. The teenagers were generic, Catherine being pregnant was not enough to help feel for her in a vampire feast. I would suggest taking a look at the following sources for a bit of guidance for the characters. Stranger Things for the teenagers. (https://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/STRANGER-THINGS-1x01-The-Vanishing-of-Will-Byers-2ND-PINK.pdf) From Dusk Till Dawn for character development and thrall action. (http://www.quentintarantino.de/download/from_dusk_till_dawn_screenplay.pdf) The Lost Boys for plot beat and character development. (http://www.dailyscript.com/scripts/TheLostBoys.htm) Near Dark for the scene setting. (http://www.horrorlair.com/scripts/Near-Dark.pdf) Thirst for more flushing out Margaet's backstory and his turmoil to hold onto his humanity and belief system. (http://www.screenplaydb.com/film/scripts/thirst20080104/) Your screenplay does read as if you are avoiding the tropes from the Twilight series and Underworld. However, in a sated genre as vampire lore, make sure you don't just have thrall gore and fight-for-your life scenes all the time. It will make the viewer weary. Get into the headspace of Margaret. I can tell you were leaving the origin of their father and the death of their mother ambiguous to keep us invested in the story. I would suggest you subvert the vampire genre. I suggest also giving us visual expressions to key us on the protagonist and antagonist's inner thoughts. Are they fearful? Angry? Lustful? Blood crave? I would recommend watching “Let the Right One In” (Tomas Alfredson, 2008) to get a sense of foreboding, and the nature of a vampire in real society. You should explain how pages from a Bible is able to trap or bind a vampire. I can tell you spent blood, sweat, and tears on this script. Good job. Look forward to your next one!

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Everything has a cost. But the cost of magic is different. Magic breaks the laws of the real world. Jesse is soon to find out the mage's price.
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In a world much like ours, a woman is pulled into events that will forever change her life on her 25th birthday.
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Angels Can Die tv series
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Horror
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A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.

This has some promise to it. I would suggest you provide more for an audience to know who Silas is as a man/priest. I didn't feel empathy for him until halfway through and then I felt lost at the revelation at the end of the pilot. I recommend reading http://www.usccb.org/prayer-and-worship/sacraments-and-sacramentals/sacramentals-blessings/exorcism.cfm to provide more context to the Rite of Roman Catholic Exorcism. There could have been more interaction with Silas and the other characters. There were elements in the story that made me think of the short story by Michelle West, "To Speak with Angels" originally published in the anthology book Villians Victorious, 2001. I know tv pilots are challenging and I can see you put some sweat into your keyboard to build this story. Do you plan an ensemble cast? How do you want the world to be built? Where are we headed, the angel's city? What unanswered questions do you want to tantalize us to drive us to watch the next episode? An example is The Walking Dead pilot. Don't feel the need to answer questions right off the bat. Let us simmer on who Sam is. build him to be a manipulative, shady character. Is he a minor demon or the King of Hell? Drip nuggets of foreshadowing by how Sam may or may not know the demons that possess the people. The mysterious mark on Silas, how did he hide it as a child from Father Malcolm or the Sister? Create an episode built on horror-action from an entirely unfamiliar world or one we all recognize. You populated your world within the City of Light but build it to be a gritty realm where not all angels are the vibrant glorious and holy beings we recognize. This could be a "suburb" of Heaven. Not purgatory, but not Heaven either. Angels assigned here should be the Host that were assigned to monitor the exiles from the First War and the Fallen Ones (angels that have not become demons but became corrupted). This takes a toll on these angelic police corp. I'd recommend looking at making the realm bleak and filter the world through either Beatrice or Silas's eyes. As for Sam, set him up as maybe an imaginary character Silas believes he made up in his mind. Silas doesn't act like your typical Catholic Priest because maybe in his background he was an alcoholic or had some type of addiction (drugs, sex, gambling, etc) but Father Malcolm rescued him. Silas copes with his duties and Sam in some hidden way. Maybe the Nun has hidden feelings for Silas? Or Sam slips in and out of Silas without his knowledge and "Sam passed Silas" and the Nun have been intimate or having an affair, thus corrupting the nun, allowing her to be passed by the minor demon. All a ruse to isolate Silas and manipulate him to become exposed. But how does an amnesiac angel become branded with the sigil to control a Demon King? How about building Silas up to be a child of a Nephilim that has been in hiding since the Days of the Flood? Sam's intentions are more nefarious than anyone realizes. Is Sam to be the series or season "Big Bad" or is this series to be the Game of Thrones trope that no one is polarized good or bad, everyone is gray. There is a lot of potential in this story. Make sure you flow your plot beats to your story arc. Take a look at the "Dark Arl" comic book series written by Cullen Bunn. You can go to GetComics and download it for free. All you need is a CBR file reader. This can give you some backstory ideas for the whole story. Take a look at the "Hexed" comic book series by Michael Alan Nelson. ou can go to GetComics and download it for free. All you need is a CBR file reader. This can give you some backstory ideas for Beatrice. Take a look at the (1995) movie, "The Prophecy" - The angel Gabriel comes to Earth to collect a soul which will end the stalemated war in Heaven, and only a former priest and a little girl can stop him. In your television series, is this along the lines of what you're seeking with the King of Hell vs the City of Angels police force?

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3 months ago
Angels Can Die tv series
Genre: Sci-Fi/Fantasy,Horror
A young priest journeys with the devil and finds God.