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Stephen Diomedi just claimed a review for a television script
5 hours ago
Craft of Five tv series
Genre: Comedy
Five young, starving, artist, roomies trying to ‘make it’ without killing each other in the process.
5 months ago
reviews
31 pages
Caleb Densman just claimed a review for a short script
6 hours ago
HE IS HERE short
Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
A traumatised former lawyer feels a constant terrifying presence and struggles to understand if it is real or a product of his own mind.
3 months ago
3 reviews
26 pages
Cyle Brooks completed a review for
7 hours ago
Inheritance short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Review Rating:

Concept: I've seen several movies about characters getting an inheritance from a deceased loved one, but the inheritance is usually money or a house or land of some kind, but definitely not a gun. The inheritance of the gun is the only somewhat original thing about the concept here. Story: The story wasn't good. I honestly had to stop reading it about halfway through because of how ridiculous and cliche it was. Knowing that the inheritance is a gun is something different, but from what I've read, you took the easy way out and made the dead grandfather possess the gun for evil deeds, just like many, MANY other horror stories. There are way too many horror films in which the nicest people you could meet die and they come back as evil, demonic spirits for literally no reason. You could've gone down the path of Lonnie just straight up loses his sanity and takes it out on his loved ones with the gun in his grandfather's name or something like that. Possession is one of the dumbest and most cliched things to add into a horror story because they are not scary and they are greatly overused. Structure: The story kind of jumps around from scene to scene and it gets hard to follow along with, especially since it feels like I'm reading a book in script format rather than a legitimate script. Some felt like they dragged on and on whereas others felt like they were just unnecessary. Character Development: There was little character development shown. All I got from this was that Lonnie got bullied at school for reasons unknown and that he was close to his grandfather. That and his grandfather did bad stuff and returned to possess a gun for evil. This kind of character development doesn't really make sense to me and needs to be further looked into and explored because, with all that's presented, I didn't care one bit about the characters. Dialogue: A lot of the dialogue came off as unrealistic and even at some points exaggerated. This was one of the main reasons why I couldn't finish the story. The dialogue was ridiculous and it didn't feel like it flowed very well for plot or transitions. Conclusion: A lot of work needs put into this for it to receive better feedback, specifically on originality for storytelling, better character development, and realistic dialogue. There were also several instances of missing punctuation and words that were missing apostrophes, but those are more nitpicks. But that being said, with those changes, this could turn out to be a decent thrilling short story.

3 days ago
1 reviews
8 pages
Stephen Diomedi just claimed a review for a feature script
7 hours ago
Shadow Vile Figure feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Animation,Thriller
Satan's biggest fear is about to come true.
4 weeks ago
reviews
63 pages
Cyle Brooks just claimed a review for a short script
10 hours ago
Inheritance short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
A teenager who has struggled with powerlessness his whole life receives an inheritance that changes everything
3 days ago
1 reviews
8 pages
Leon Fontius just joined ScriptMother!
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F F just claimed a review for a short script
12 hours ago
Man on the Phone short
Genre: Thriller,Mystery/Suspense
A careless young man finds his life falling apart after encountering a mysterious hooded stranger.
1 month ago
2 reviews
36 pages
F F uploaded a feature screenplay
12 hours ago
Starlight feature
Genre: Animation
A reluctant princess goes on the adventure of a lifetime in search of a magical stone to save the world.
12 hours ago
reviews
100 pages
Shaun Stuart Charlton just claimed a review for a short script
13 hours ago
Pads short
Genre: Horror,Drama,Thriller
A drop of blood on an immaculate floor triggers a face-off between two women
3 months ago
reviews
5 pages
Shaun Stuart Charlton just joined ScriptMother!
13 hours ago
Scott Heft just joined ScriptMother!
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Stephen Diomedi just joined ScriptMother!
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ava preston just joined ScriptMother!
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Caleb Densman just claimed a review for a short script
1 day ago
Bloom short
Genre: Drama
Reality comes crashing down when middle-aged photographer Nora and her young male model are caught trespassing.
4 months ago
2 reviews
11 pages
Eoin Kirwan just joined ScriptMother!
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Lukas Opasinov just joined ScriptMother!
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Megan Leitch uploaded a television screenplay
2 days ago
The Padlock tv series
Genre: Horror
October saves Damien from his past life. She rebirths him and we follow them as October coaches Damien to become a killer. There is romance, death, and drama. Something for everyone.
2 days ago
reviews
21 pages
Megan Leitch just joined ScriptMother!
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T J just joined ScriptMother!
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Nicole K just claimed a review for a feature script
2 days ago
Renegade feature
Genre: Drama,Romance
In a world where only 5 percent of the population have human rights, a girl becomes the bodyguard for an equality activist, inciting romance, revelations and a revolution.
1 week ago
reviews
97 pages

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ScriptMother Activity

Stephen Diomedi just claimed a review for a television script
5 hours ago
Craft of Five tv series
Genre: Comedy
Five young, starving, artist, roomies trying to ‘make it’ without killing each other in the process.
5 months ago
reviews
31 pages
Caleb Densman just claimed a review for a short script
6 hours ago
HE IS HERE short
Genre: Horror,Mystery/Suspense,Thriller
A traumatised former lawyer feels a constant terrifying presence and struggles to understand if it is real or a product of his own mind.
3 months ago
3 reviews
26 pages
Cyle Brooks completed a review for
7 hours ago
Inheritance short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
Review Rating:

Concept: I've seen several movies about characters getting an inheritance from a deceased loved one, but the inheritance is usually money or a house or land of some kind, but definitely not a gun. The inheritance of the gun is the only somewhat original thing about the concept here. Story: The story wasn't good. I honestly had to stop reading it about halfway through because of how ridiculous and cliche it was. Knowing that the inheritance is a gun is something different, but from what I've read, you took the easy way out and made the dead grandfather possess the gun for evil deeds, just like many, MANY other horror stories. There are way too many horror films in which the nicest people you could meet die and they come back as evil, demonic spirits for literally no reason. You could've gone down the path of Lonnie just straight up loses his sanity and takes it out on his loved ones with the gun in his grandfather's name or something like that. Possession is one of the dumbest and most cliched things to add into a horror story because they are not scary and they are greatly overused. Structure: The story kind of jumps around from scene to scene and it gets hard to follow along with, especially since it feels like I'm reading a book in script format rather than a legitimate script. Some felt like they dragged on and on whereas others felt like they were just unnecessary. Character Development: There was little character development shown. All I got from this was that Lonnie got bullied at school for reasons unknown and that he was close to his grandfather. That and his grandfather did bad stuff and returned to possess a gun for evil. This kind of character development doesn't really make sense to me and needs to be further looked into and explored because, with all that's presented, I didn't care one bit about the characters. Dialogue: A lot of the dialogue came off as unrealistic and even at some points exaggerated. This was one of the main reasons why I couldn't finish the story. The dialogue was ridiculous and it didn't feel like it flowed very well for plot or transitions. Conclusion: A lot of work needs put into this for it to receive better feedback, specifically on originality for storytelling, better character development, and realistic dialogue. There were also several instances of missing punctuation and words that were missing apostrophes, but those are more nitpicks. But that being said, with those changes, this could turn out to be a decent thrilling short story.

3 days ago
1 reviews
8 pages
Stephen Diomedi just claimed a review for a feature script
7 hours ago
Shadow Vile Figure feature
Genre: Action/Adventure,Animation,Thriller
Satan's biggest fear is about to come true.
4 weeks ago
reviews
63 pages
Cyle Brooks just claimed a review for a short script
10 hours ago
Inheritance short
Genre: Mystery/Suspense,Horror
A teenager who has struggled with powerlessness his whole life receives an inheritance that changes everything
3 days ago
1 reviews
8 pages
Leon Fontius just joined ScriptMother!
11 hours ago
F F just claimed a review for a short script
12 hours ago
Man on the Phone short
Genre: Thriller,Mystery/Suspense
A careless young man finds his life falling apart after encountering a mysterious hooded stranger.
1 month ago
2 reviews
36 pages
F F uploaded a feature screenplay
12 hours ago
Starlight feature
Genre: Animation
A reluctant princess goes on the adventure of a lifetime in search of a magical stone to save the world.
12 hours ago
reviews
100 pages
Shaun Stuart Charlton just claimed a review for a short script
13 hours ago
Pads short
Genre: Horror,Drama,Thriller
A drop of blood on an immaculate floor triggers a face-off between two women
3 months ago
reviews
5 pages
Shaun Stuart Charlton just joined ScriptMother!
13 hours ago
Scott Heft just joined ScriptMother!
1 day ago
Stephen Diomedi just joined ScriptMother!
1 day ago
ava preston just joined ScriptMother!
1 day ago
Caleb Densman just claimed a review for a short script
1 day ago
Bloom short
Genre: Drama
Reality comes crashing down when middle-aged photographer Nora and her young male model are caught trespassing.
4 months ago
2 reviews
11 pages
Eoin Kirwan just joined ScriptMother!
1 day ago
Lukas Opasinov just joined ScriptMother!
1 day ago
Megan Leitch uploaded a television screenplay
2 days ago
The Padlock tv series
Genre: Horror
October saves Damien from his past life. She rebirths him and we follow them as October coaches Damien to become a killer. There is romance, death, and drama. Something for everyone.
2 days ago
reviews
21 pages
Megan Leitch just joined ScriptMother!
2 days ago
T J just joined ScriptMother!
2 days ago
Nicole K just claimed a review for a feature script
2 days ago
Renegade feature
Genre: Drama,Romance
In a world where only 5 percent of the population have human rights, a girl becomes the bodyguard for an equality activist, inciting romance, revelations and a revolution.
1 week ago
reviews
97 pages