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Speaking To The Dead

By Van Lutz

A young girl, devastated by her mother's murder, works with her spirit to bring her killer to justice, before anyone else dies.

Draft #2
Draft #1
Peer Rating: 43%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 43%
Draft 1: 67%
2 Reviews | 91 pages | 4 months ago | Draft 2


Loosely based on a true crime story.

The majority here is fiction. The parts of the crime that seem unbelievable are true. The parts that make perfect sense are fiction.

True crimes shows usually entertain me. This particular episode of Your Worst Nightmare, is truly everyone's worst nightmare.

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Overall, the story was interesting. But, the pacing was uneven. For the first two acts the pacing was slow. However, the third act pacing was fantastic and had me on the edge of my seat in suspense. The characterization was well done. The dialogue was natural.

4 months ago |
All in all, a great idea that needs to be written in a more serious tone and manner. Exploration of grief by the main character should be at the center of it. Slowly building tension with the murder and supernatural elements should take place on every page. Complexity should pour over every character.
I would recommend you trim down all unnecessary accessory elements, focus on Jeanie's struggle with the death of her mother. Start by giving them...

3 months ago |
A very strong screenplay with excellent character development and a well structured story. The last 20 pages introduce a twist that this reader questions as necessary, as it drastically changes the tone of the preceding film. That being said, the twist was still well structured, if a bit of a stretch. The story has excellent pacing and flows well. The overall concept, while not entirely original, shows a good working of a family drama and mur...

4 months ago |
Chris Lutzow Top Reviewer
First thing's first, you are a bonafide screenwriter. I can tell that by your writing. You have a very unique voice and it works well with the script you have written. There isn't much to tell you about the craft of screen writing because it's obvious that you have put much study into it. You write like someone that has been doing it for years. You know what you want to say, you know what you want your characters to do and you know where you want...

4 months ago |
Kwesi Lewis Top Reviewer

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