Overall, your script has potential and there's definitely potential for a very dynamic story. The themes and message are also compelling. However, the story needs a more dynamic plot, and needs to build and build. Once you get this down, the ending won't necessarily change, but the journey of the protagonist and the events of your story will look a lot different.
Maya discovers her path to destiny---in search of her actual father---having been through the stormy lives of prostitution, armed robbery and drug trafficking in Southern Africa
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