Jacob obsesses over plants as a result of his parents’ death, but when he stumbles into a thoughtful young lady named Emma, his life takes a turn towards happiness.
I hope to receive some feedback on my short-film screenplay including the narrative itself. I have also got a pitch deck if anyone are interested in seeing the visual themes of the film.
Any feedback and critique would be greatly appreciated!
Using ScriptMother's Criteria:
The Concept is not strong/original.
The logline/first ten pages does not draw the reader.
The scenes are not well-written.
The protagonist/antagonist is not compelling enough.
The dialogue does not drive the story/character.
The conflict is real/genuine.
The Pacing is okay.
The Climax/Resolution satisfies the reader.
The script does not read well.
Most of my advice is in the many Script notes. I always fi...
Britney’s sexually abused by her mother's boyfriend and tells John and they decide to punish Ben, but Ben dies, Britney’s now prosecuted for two murders and John can’t be found.
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