Is the Concept strong/original? No. A daughter who is taking over her fathers legacy. Not that unusual.
Does the logline/first ten pages draw the reader? They are fine.
Are scenes well-written? Yes and no. it is very hard to match dialog to Action. What I'm talking about is the description of the fathers action may take longer or shorter than the narrator. Not until the introduction of CLEMENTINE FLOWERS does the (V.O.) stops. Having ARIA...
A trio of mercenaries with the aid of a former spy investigate a cabal intent on global technocracy while trying to rescue her best friend from the clutches of a psychotic scientist.
In order to prevent Imperialism from dominating the world, a united group of colorful elite travel back in time, risking everything to rewrite history and save humanity from the current reality.
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