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After Humans

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By Joe Munsterman
Thriller

When three deformed bodies wash into an oil rig, a dissatisfied geologist battles her suppressive boss to launch a secret investigation into their puzzling origins.

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Peer Rating: 47%
Industry Rating: N/A
1 Reviews | 26 pages | 1 month ago | Draft 1

Summary

This is a rough first draft of the first act and a little then some. I’m not expecting a ton of feedback, but specifically, I’m wondering about the pacing of scenes, does the opening work (only visual), character depth/differentiation, and lastly, can you follow it/are you intrigued to keep reading? Some action lines are just telling right now, but I’m hoping to catch any glaring errors early before cranking out 90 pages. Of course, I’m open to anything else you see as far as suggestions and feedback.

Thanks.

P.S. If you really hate Scott, you’ll love the ending.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Overall I think this is a good read for a short thriller. If you are considering revising, I'd advise you clarifying the location and scene descriptions and improving on your dialogue. I think the ending was good, leaving a suspense on the dead bodies. A part of me wondered if the dead bodies were coworkers of Jackie and Chuck's. The ending left me with more questions than answers, like was Scott involved? These are good because it leaves me exci...

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