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Insurance Ep 1: Guilt

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Family,Drama

A mother dies and the daughter has to deal with pressure of thinking it was her fault.

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Draft #1
Peer Rating: 47%
Industry Rating: 27%
2 Reviews | 28 pages | 3 weeks ago | Draft 1

Summary

The irresponsible Eliza Harrington and her cousin Dan Tex tries to hide the death of Ina Harrington.

Industry Reviews

Overall, this was a fair first draft for a drama pilot episode. I would recommend working on making the story more original and giving your main characters more depth and making them more likable, especially Dan. Good luck!

1 week ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer

Peer Reviews

It depends on what you're trying to achieve. Either the tone or focus of the show needs to be expanded. It feels like a light murder comedy as of now, with a few character moments forced in.
Not sure where you’re going with the jewels? Will Mac follow that trail, or will he follow Dan and eliza's trail of neighborhood crime?
If this is serialized to a certain amount, what is the season going to look like? Eliza with the cops (good cliffhanger...

2 weeks ago | read more...

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