I ran out of time to do a full read of the script. Try adding more time for reviews.
1) You dialog is unrealistic. I do not read scripts, I put them in a text to speech program and listen to the script. You need to do the same. Close you eyes and hear the voices. Do they sound different? Is everyone using the same words? Are you putting in exposition instead of dialog?
2) You have people going into someone back yard and trying to start a r...
When a high school theater troupe stages The Phantom of the Opera, the students unknowingly unravel dark secrets tied to the tragic death of a former starlet, whose mysterious fate is linked to the very play they're performing.
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