Too Strong To Die short
#Action/Adventure #Drama
A determined young girl sets off to find her mother in a fabled place, but when that place makes her hallucinate her resolve wavers.
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10 pages |
5 years ago
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Draft 1
A soon-to-be queen of her tribe has been obsessed with finding her mother ever since she disappeared in search of a place known as the Field of Dreams. She finally sets out to find her and the field of dreams, and when she reaches her destinations she's met with a stark reality.
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A delightful little script full of fantasy, quests, and spirits; however, the plotline is confusing in parts, and the script is riddled with formatting issues.
I hope these references and examples will help,
Jack (aka DRayVan)
FORMATTING ISSUES: Details below
• SCENE HEADERS
• BEATS
• CHARACTER INTRODUCTIONS/DESCRIPTIONS
• DIALOGUE: On-the-nose; spoon-feeding the audience
• DIALOGUE: Parentheticals – Several examples
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