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When a missing persons case lead authorities to the farm of a mysterious recluse, he’s forced to go to war with law enforcement to protect a sinister force that could destroy the entire town.

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Peer Rating: 62%

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3 Reviews | 105 pages | 4 years ago | Draft 1

This is a supernatural thriller I just finished.

Here, I'm playing with narrative structure and telling the story over two days, Yesterday and Today. I'm hoping this adds to the experience, but you'll let me know.

A word of caution, this script portrays a lot of violence. Know, I mean a lot, a lot, but be daring and give it a read anyway.

A brainwashed farmer goes to war with law enforcement to protect a divine secret in exchange for eternal life.

Underwood is a unique concept and a twist on the faiths that seek to expose the divine word to the world, this story is about protecting a divine secret. It made the story an interesting read, and I was interested throughout even though it was more out of intrigue of what the hell is going on here as opposed to exposition telling me tell and keeping me up to speed. Good thing? Bad thing? I don't know; it's just, I didn't get a grasp on the who's,...

1 year ago | read more...

Damian R Top Reviewer

A man introduces unseen and unheard evil in a community.

I think the concept it good. This can be a truly great and satisfying story but it has to go through series of rewrites. I will point the problems out as I progress. The concept is original though. A mixture of action/thriller and horror. That's a good combination.
The logline is good enough. It made me wanna read it in the first place. The first ten pages certainly drew me in. It got me excited though I must say that a few things were wrong fro...

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Chukwuma Amobi Top Reviewer

A missing person's case leads to a mysterious man who will do anything at all costs to keep hold his secret. A secret that can undo us all.

I love the storyline. It was easy to follow and made me care about the characters. It had vibes of the recent movie "Brightburn". There were some punctuation errors that can be easily corrected. A couple of dialogue sequences were a bit cliche, but overall I didn't think it was too on-the-nose. One example is
DEPUTY THOMAS
But I’m curious. Why’d you kill Representative Lee?
UNDERWOOD
A guy like you is worth a thousand
Representative Lees....

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