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By Keith St. Lawrence

A simple background character from a sitcom learns that his television world is just one of many.

Draft #2
Draft #1
Peer Rating: 83%
Industry Rating: N/A
Draft 2: 83%
Draft 1: 72%
2 Reviews | 36 pages | 2 years ago | Draft 2


A background character discovers that he can leave his television show behind because of the Tommy Westphall Universe Hypothesis.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

Wow. Really great, love everything about it. I really think this show has legs and that it could make an awesome series. You are clearly an amazing writer and have got some great skills. It was difficult at the start to follow and work out what the story was about, but when I read on it became clear. I think there could be a scene at the start of the show, even just a short few second cut to a family at home watching the show to establish that it...

1 year ago |
Jackson Boswell Top Reviewer
I really enjoyed this script. It is definitely something I would likely watch and would actually love to have a hand in helping you create it. If you need someone to play Anthony, I'm your guy!

The story was great and original. Very well thought out especially how the audience was behind the "fourth wall". I got a serious "Black Mirror" vibe from it. The characters were well-written, memorable and funny. I liked Steve the most being an ill-man...

1 year ago |
Vinay Kilaire Top Reviewer
The overall concept is fun. It reminds me of a Family Guy episode, when we saw what happens during one of Peter’s flash backs. The structure of the story and the characters are well done. We have a clear begining with cause and effect, and have a predictable, yet working ending. There were umorous lines, but i didn’t really get a good chuckle until pg 20 “now is not the time”. This would work well as a cartoon, adult swim perhaps with some work....

1 year ago |
UDJASON Top Reviewer
This pilot does an impeccable job of showing the limitless potential of its premise. Effortlessly blending the off beat comedic style of a Community with the dimension hopping parody of a Rick and Morty, Westphall promises clever dialogue, interesting characters, and an emotional element that works just as well as everything else.
The characters are strong, within the cold open we get everything we need to know about them, though some foreshadow...

1 year ago |
For starters, the concept is incredibly strong and the highlight of the script, brimming with possibilities for future episodes and seasons. The story provides an excellent introduction to the world and how it operates, from the use of deus ex machinas and channel hopping to the Westphall hub that maintains order. It makes the reader eager to find out more. Deciding to pull a minor character not just from a sitcom, but a bad sitcom for the pil...

1 year ago |
Michael Harris Top Reviewer
I am a huge fan of meta comedy so this pilot works for me on a lot of levels. It's clear this writer is extremely well-versed in TV and the different conventions and archetypes, which is really fun to read (particularly from a writer's perspective). From the first moment I understand exactly what this show is about and I can follow the action seamlessly. Every character feels necessary and it's a really fun subversion that your 'leading' cast in...

1 year ago |
SL Eastwood Top Reviewer

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