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MAT

short
By Marc Buckley
Sci-Fi/Fantasy

In a factory of teddy bears one is different. That difference may save them all.

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Peer Rating: 47%
Industry Rating: N/A
3 Reviews | 5 pages | 2 years ago | Draft 1

Summary

In a futuristic world where teddy bears are created with robotic skeletons one is made differently. He is alone in the world but on one terrible night his difference may be the one thing to save them all.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

This script is truly amazing! The storyline was built wonderfully and the information about Mat, the other bears, the factory, the hospital, etc. are dealt to the reader gradually and at the right times. The structure is pretty good as well, but the formatting rules (which are one of the most important things in screenwriting) are not always met.

To begin flashbacks, you should write a separate line saying "BEGIN FLASHBACK:" in the form of an...

1 year ago | read more...
So, I’m not entirely sure what to think of this one. It’s an intriguing premise. It would probably make a good animation and reminds me a little of the film 9.

It is formatted correctly, but is a bit of a tedious read due to the overlong sections of prose. Action text should be short and to the point whereas this reads more like a novel, which makes it hard to follow in places. Each separate action needs its own line really and you should try...

1 year ago | read more...
SL Eastwood Top Reviewer
This script is truly interesting and engaging to the reader. It iss structure is very well done. It is exposition heavy which makes it a little tedious to read but nonetheless it is very well done. Even with the little dialouge I was able to understand what the bears were doing in the story itself. With that I think you could describe the environment more, like the factory and the hospital.

The storyline is quite intriguing and unique. I woul...

1 year ago | read more...

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