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The Hunter

short
By Cyle Brooks
Horror,Action/Adventure

Some legends are too scary not to be true.

Approved
Nominee
Draft #1
Peer Rating: 50%
Industry Rating: N/A
4 Reviews | 10 pages | 3 weeks ago | Draft 1

Summary

Michael and his friends decide to go on a camping trip to a place where people don't dare to go because of the mythical legend known as "The Hunter." But little do Michael and his friends know that some legends are too horrifying not to be true.

Rated R for horror violence/terror.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

A poorly written script that has no story, least of all a plot to work towards. This redundant's any comment to structure, concept, pace, character, dialogue, etc. As the reader would never the less read the script through to the end... least of all page 4, max. I, unfortunately, committed myself to have to read it through. It's clear the writer put no effort (self-pride) into this at all, and the writer needs to realise that; Then why should the...

2 weeks ago | read more...
The first half felt like a cliche urban legend camping horror movie. The characters I think could've been written better, because then it would make it easier for the viewers to care about them when they die. But the second half made it way better. Just reading I can see how dangerous and scary the hunter is. Also as a gore lover, the brutal kills really helped. Some other things I liked, I like the dialogue between characters, reading it, I can...

2 weeks ago | read more...
Marlon Schwiersch Top Reviewer
I really enjoyed your story, it was a fun and breezy read. Here's a couple of notes.

Pg. 1
I liked your opening scene description, but from what I've been told by writers
much better than myself, you're supposed to keep the scene description more sparse.
I believe this is so the directors are not hampered in their creative vision
when adapting a story for the screen.

Pg. 2
How is the audience able to tell that the picture of Michael...

1 week ago | read more...
JONATHAN BARBOUR Top Reviewer
Story wise, I think you have a fantastic concept. It's nothing new but at the same time, it's one that never really grows stale. I think people will always enjoy watching teens die in horrific ways. However there are a few things that you need to work on.
Your dialog is very stiff and unnatural sounding. The conversations do not seem like ones real people would have. Try reading them aloud when you review it yourself and see what I mean. Very st...

1 week ago | read more...
Grant Miller Top Reviewer

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