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Cult Kid

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By JONATHAN BARBOUR
Comedy,Sci-Fi/Fantasy

A teenage boy is forced to be a part of the family cult when all he wants to do is be normal and go to school.

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Draft #1
Peer Rating: 80%
Industry Rating: N/A
4 Reviews | 23 pages | 4 weeks ago | Draft 1

Summary

Danny Nightwing wants three things in life, he wants to go to school, he wants to be like other teenagers, and he wants to kiss girls. However, that's hard to do when your dad is insistent that you be a part of your families cult.

Danny struggles between making his dad happy and doing what he wants, but he seems to finally catch a break when he becomes the cult's oracle (or speaker) for their dark elder God, Bolgothra.

No one can see or hear Bolgothra except for Danny, so being the irresponsible teenager he is, this becomes an excuse to get away with whatever he wants. And his first request is to go to a public high school.

Industry Reviews

Peer Reviews

This was really funny. Not so much in any specific one-liners, but in the overall tone and set-up. I can immediately this, and see how it would be done. It's kind of become an old joke to take classic horror movie shenanigans and play them for deadpan laughs, but the joke is still funny, so why not do it with a cult of Cthulu. The loser teenager who just wants to get with the cute girl while his dad is pushing him into the family business is...

3 weeks ago | read more...
Kelly Smith Top Reviewer
I'll start with how original the humor is and how the idea gives you so many options for funny situations. At first I wasn't sure if it's going to be a comedy but at the end I was already. Definitely a very funny and genuine story. Pleasing to read, easy to follow. What you should know is that big pieces of text put together don't appeal to the writer. I saw a few descriptions that were just too much and don't look good. If you've read enough scr...

2 weeks ago | read more...
Hello fellow screenplay writer.

I think the concept is quite original. Although it has some formulaic elements, the use of the dark lord as a figure of tragedy is fresh and appealing. The story appears strong and simple, not prone to confusion or needing clarification. I have no concern about your structure. Technically, it appears that the script is strong. Character development is good because in 23 pages, I feel it is quite difficult to...

2 weeks ago | read more...
Paul Vecchiet Top Reviewer
Here were my thoughts on this script:

1. Concept - Although the concept itself isn't original entirely, I did like the fact that you took a comedy approach instead of the overdone horror approach.

2. Story - I thought the story was easy enough to follow, albeit a bit predictable. Despite it's predictability, the story felt like it was at a good pace which is always nice.

3. Structure - Formatting and structuring were good for the most pa...

3 days ago | read more...
Cyle Brooks Top Reviewer

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